Beyond The Haze : A Lilly pseudo-route - II-14 added 13-10-2024

[Sharp-O]

Good job on this chapter, Razor!

[SilentM]

Nice to see this is back. Your English has definitely improved!

I'm a little confused where the tension with Sumire is coming from though. Suddenly describing Kaori as a troublemaker now, 24 chapters in, doesn't feel like it fits with her characterization up to this point.

[Razoredge]

Thank you Sharpy (for your job correcting the chapter by the way) and thanks SilentM too

For your answer, describing her as a troublemaker was more of a Lullaby of an Open Heart thing, but I wanted to add it in this story too. Maybe doing it that late in the story wasn't the best choice, I admit.