Umm, really? 1 post ever posted? Maybe I'm paranoid, but this is too strangekatt wrote:For what it's worth, I enjoyed reading your little "story" and the numerous grammar errors didn't bother me at all., nor did the odd lay-out for that matter. Because it was irrelevant. The story, that's all I cared about, and I liked it.
I carefully read all the critisism.
The car crash, too much of a coincidence? Don't think so, considering its fiction. Besides, how much of a coincidence is it that all the disabled girls in the story are so attractive...
The ending I had no trouble understanding at all, I immediatelly understood they were both dead.
Bringing in the 2 corpses was unrealistic? No, in my opinion it was to make Hisao believe they were still alive and sleeping.
Maybe you could make some endings for other characters?
Because some of us, readers, do like it.
