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Yeah, I had trouble drawing anything larger than a C-cup for the longest time, but really just look up some decent breast tutorials (not from deviantART, you'll just be learning how to draw breasts from people that have never seen them) and it's not that hard to figure out how to add weight and size ...

Also, in response to boob size, we're talking a very loose fitting shirt/nightgown she's wearing, they're definately bigger than that. That just means they'd sag, not magically shrink down a few cup sizes. I'm not saying they have to be SHUT UP YOU TITTY MONSTER but they'd still definitely be ...

One thing I think I should note:

This is Shizune. After giving birth to a child. I think she'd have something more than a B-cup.

The only problem I have is her hair highlights. I just think they're far too bright and stringy. Turn it down some or make them smaller/wider, and it'll be perfect.

There are some things that you have to say to yourself "Should I really post this?" before you upload it for all to gaze at.

This story is one of those things.

The only one I can really hear consistently is Haurko for Rin. The bluntness and the out-of-focus voice just seems to fit.

Also, Norio Wakamoto for your Homeroom Teacher (name escapes me at the moment). Only...speaking in English, without an accent...yeah.

I thought it was Lelouch.

Sabata wrote:Way to totally ignore everything I told you to fix, 'Deous. I could've been playing Iji. >.>

What? I totally wrote around/over/did fix most of what you said. I will give you that playing Iji is a very good reason to not do other things, but still.

Alright, I tried to go back and fix it up some according to the critique I got. Thanks for your help everyone.

And you're right SirAkbar, that's what I get for writing this all at once with not proofreading. Stupid casual dialect being portrayed through writing.

LeeEzekiel wrote:This.

Is.

ART.

100% ART!

I just like how Misha's response to being hit in the face with a bucket of water is to stand there, completely silent while her drills drain out. I suppose that's in contrast to her normal personality, huh?

Thanks for the positive feedback, this was really my first time writing for fun rather than for classes or something. I tried to make it as "D'aaaaaaaaaw" as possible, and it looked like I managed that. @WASSHOI ~ Well, I'm an artist firstoff, not a writer. So it probably comes from me seeing the ...

That was...very very good. Honestly I don't think you have to go any further with it at this point, give the reader a little bit of open-endedness.

I actually prefer the lighter one. It helps her hair stand out more, and the red on the dark's a bit too saturated for me.

Hey, first time writing a story for here...or ever for that matter...so forgive me if it just plain sucks. This'll be Hisao/Hanako with nosex. --- My feet grazed across the blue skys, dashing though endless wonders. The sky through which I soared was a beautiful blue color with serene clouds that ...