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Nothing made me feel, so I never expected a game to do so. Thanks for the experience, maybe it will put me on a better path. Really? Never enjoyed a good pastry? Felt pain when you stubbed your toe? Been disappointed when someone eats the last piece of pizza? Dude, I think he might be depressed. At ...

nearly hitting a few cars on its strange, meandering path through the sparse city streets. The car stopped beneath the window. four men got out

it's -> it is
and you'd generally want to spell out numbers that are less than four digits.

After writing this, I realised I hate this chapter but I don't know why. Probably going to re-work it Chapter Four: 'Alright, I'll see you around!' Emi smiles as she waves off a pair of track club juniors until they are lost amidst the human traffic headed towards the canteen. She turns back to me ...

Spent the last week finishing Kerouac's On the Road. Huge waste of time. Worst decision ever.

My apologies, but chapter four is going to take a while more - it's about two-fifths done. I've never been very good at writing back-and-forth conversation but there's no avoiding it now

I lean back on my chair – it squeaks in protest – and ponder the essence of being a teacher.

was about to comment that the bit in the middle seemed to deliberately detract from the mood. then i read till the end and thought: never mind.

if a dev writes it it automatically becomes canon right?

haha rekt.

mea culpa

i'll give it a shot, but i'm really swamped between the army, dota2, learning japanese, writing my own, reading, and so on ...



and thank you all so far for your kind words.

That's some damn heavy lifting you're going to have to do, there. If you can pull it off believably, I'll be suitably impressed. That said, unless you've read Developments , the Emi I know may not be the Emi you think I know :wink:. Well, I did say it was ambitious! If I pull it off I will be ...

I wouldn't think this was Emi's voice either. But it's worth noting that we only ever experience Hisao's narrative voice in KS - and I'm a big fan of unreliable narration. That sort of open-ended potential makes it great for fanfiction. At least that's what I think. I won't spoil anything, but ...

i think i'll begin this scene in media res (this chapter has to be largely in present tense), so, starting from when she sits on his bed - does it work now?

This is a short chapter. --- Chapter Three: Hisao's asleep. I don't really blame him. Interval training is hard and a challenge by design. Unlike set distances or timings, the terms 'jog' and 'sprint' are entirely subjective, and it's up to the trainee to push him or herself to the limit with a ...

*If they are on their backs, the summaries won't be exposed... yes i kept reading that and wondering to myself whether the phrase 'on their fronts' even made any sense hahaha Re: first person immediacy, i do agree. i think i'll stick with the past tense. present has that disgusting sensation of a ...

thanks for the tense catch. i keep slipping back and forth between the present and past continuous. i notice that a lot of authors make the transition fluid and natural though. any advice regarding this? nonetheless, will make sure to proofread better in the future. could you elaborate on the verb ...

Don't worry, it's not abandoned. In fact, I'm posting chapter two in about 2 hours or so. Edit: Yeah, just did so, and made the necessary edits to the prologue and chapter one as well. While it may not seem so, I've mainly been working on the middle portion, the fruits of which won't be seen for a ...

Nod.

Just to share, Emi's shed scene happened because the devs really wanted an anal scene to spice things up (of all things, they were concerned about being too boring and vanilla).

Hivemind drew the short straw, so he decided to portray accurately by making it awkward for everyone.

I definitely understand now. I'm really grateful that you guys took the time. I'm not too concerned about losing readers, if that's the cost of learning. Though I do wish I didn't lose them so stupidly. wtf After I finished KS and looked through developer comments and interviews, I realised what a ...