Reconnect (Post-Hanako Bad End)
Re: Reconnect (Post-Hanako Bad End)
Felt like I was reading an ad lib, summarized, retelling of the good ending from the VN.
Re: Reconnect (Post-Hanako Bad End)
I'm certain there's some way for you to get the same point across without reusing the exact same lines form the good end. There was some good stuff like the broken and battered soul bit, but seeing so many of the exact same lines from the game made me just kind of skip through it.
Also, this sentence was awesome, if a bit lengthy, and there should be more like it, but there wasn't.
Also, this sentence was awesome, if a bit lengthy, and there should be more like it, but there wasn't.
And yes, tenses. Too many for me to point out every instance. Gewd lawd.He contorts his face into a snarl and is about to begin what I assume to be a diatribe about me letting down every living thing on the planet with a Y chromosome, but I take preemptive actions.
Re: Reconnect (Post-Hanako Bad End)
yeah I can see how just rehashing the convo from the other ending is lame
I'll try to change it
I'll try to change it
It only hurts when I breathe
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Re: Reconnect (Post-Hanako Bad End)
Wait...so Hisao's with Hanako, but he's going to f**k Misha? What alternate KS route is this and how can I get it in my game?
That guy who writes too many crossovers.
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Re: Reconnect (Post-Hanako Bad End)
THE TENSES! MY GOD THE TENSES! But whatever, I liked the story until the ending, it felt like a rehashed good ending. The rest of the story however, was pretty good, I really liked the message in the book, a clever idea that was...
First Play through: Lilly>Hanako>Emi>Rin>Shizune
Second Play Through: Hanako>Rin>Lilly>Shizune>Emi
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Second Play Through: Hanako>Rin>Lilly>Shizune>Emi
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Re: Reconnect (Post-Hanako Bad End)
Ah tenses, the enemy of all mankind. The destroyer of all good thoughts and countless worlds and the master of a million wise. How I hate thee.
But anyway, yeah, good stuff so far man. Of course, I basically call anything not overly heartdestroying good so take that as you will.
But anyway, yeah, good stuff so far man. Of course, I basically call anything not overly heartdestroying good so take that as you will.
I'm not good with this sort of thing, so I"m just going to say it here:
Thank you, Four Leaf Studios.
That is all.
Thank you, Four Leaf Studios.
That is all.
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Re: Reconnect (Post-Hanako Bad End)
I've there's no Bender in the epilogue I will lose all respect for you and punch you.
Bad Dreams (Hanako) - My first KS fanfic. it's actually a happy story
Reconciliation - (a Hanako bad-end story) - My second KS fanfic. Not all that happy.
Reconciliation - (a Hanako bad-end story) - My second KS fanfic. Not all that happy.