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[Doomish]

Forget it.

[MoonShadow]

I don't feel any different from when I told you I hated you. And I still won't sleep tonight.

I hope you understood that I don't really hate you ; I can't since I don't know you. It was all a figure of speech.

I've just read the original story from Harlan Ellison, and I think your story is worse, in the good sense. I mean, none of Ellison's caracther were truly insane, unlike Hanako. Also, it's easier for me to put myself in the place of Hisao than Ted.

I think your story is one of the most disturbing things I ever read, and I am an avid reader of Stephen King and Patrick Senecal, as well as a pretty deviant writer myself.

[Sperance]

Oh, it's fine I don't hate you. I mean, it's not like I had planned on sleeping anytime soon. Evil bastard

[boredism]

aww... you took Rin away! Not that I hate her and want to see her suffer or anything, but i think Rin is an interesting character to throw in...
And thank you, this should keep me awake during the lecture...

[griffon8]

Creepy…

This kind of story is not normally something I'm interested in. Yet somehow, I want to know what happens next.

[Mirage_GSM]

I just hope it's not the original ending...
But the setup so far suggests it will be.
Well, I hope I'll be proven wrong.

[myshoesarebrown]

Well, I enjoyed reading that. Not sure if that's good or bad. I think I'll look into the original story at some point. Or that point and click adventure game, if it's any good.

I feel the worst about Lilly. She's just... stuck there, and I imagine trying to move at all will be incredibly painful. It reminds me of The Inferno, and how the worst punishment of all is being unable to act.

[MoonShadow]

Well, I enjoyed reading that. Not sure if that's good or bad. I think I'll look into the original story at some point. Or that point and click adventure game, if it's any good.

You can look on the internet, quite a few sites give you the story. It's a short story, takes 15 minutes to read. Just google "I Have No Mouth and I Must Scream story" (be sure to add story, or you'll get only links for the game) and choose the third link. Well, in Canada it's the third link.

Edit : Nevermind the googling, here's the link for you : http://www.surfturk.com/endoftheworld/ihavenomouth.html

[myshoesarebrown]

Well, I enjoyed reading that. Not sure if that's good or bad. I think I'll look into the original story at some point. Or that point and click adventure game, if it's any good.

You can look on the internet, quite a few sites give you the story. It's a short story, takes 15 minutes to read. Just google "I Have No Mouth and I Must Scream story" (be sure to add story, or you'll get only links for the game) and choose the third link. Well, in Canada it's the third link.

Edit : Nevermind the googling, here's the link for you : http://www.surfturk.com/endoftheworld/ihavenomouth.html

When you're a slow reader like me, it's 30 minutes... But thanks for the link, a fun read. Hoping for a similar ending in this story. Not that I hate the characters or anything, just seems like the best ending for this scenario in my mind.

[Doomish]

Forget it.

[Demonhornz]

Why did I just read this and why do I want to read more?

[MoonShadow]

Damn. I had hope that you would allow everyone to survive and beat the voice, unlike Ellison. But after chapter 2, I'm not so sure.

I think you are too hard on Emi in those chapters. Let Misha get some punishment too.

[Doomish]

Forget it.

[Pyrokinesis1019]

Once again, very well written. I suppose I should read the original at some point, since I read the TF2 version you linked to, and am following this one.
Also, I've been reading most of my KS fanfics with music from the game playing in the background, but since this story is a bit... different than most others, I had to scrounge for something else. Turns out that Friendly Faith Plate, 15 Acres of Broken Glass, and I Saw A Deer Today, from the Portal 2 OST fit pretty well with this story.
Keep up the nice work!

[myshoesarebrown]

I step through the threshold. From the beginning, I suspected there was something more to all this than just a malevolent voice that tortured us when it felt like it, and now I have a direct confirmation that I was right. The one thing I never expected, and yet somehow still predicted, is standing beyond the door, in the hallway next to me, with a vacant, blinking expression.

Here, I could have sworn we were going to see Mutou for some god forsaken reason.

“Hisao..?” She has enough time to raise her half-awake eyes in my direction before I throw her into the tightest embrace my quivering body can muster.

Here, I could have sworn we were going to see Iwanako, for another god forsaken reason.

Unless the voice ends up being AM or something, I wouldn't be surprised if it were Iwanako. For some reason, I can also imagine it being Mutou.