From Shizune's Perspective

[Goldilurks]

In what sense? That every female character in my stories should be presumed gay until proven straightbi?

[griffon8]

I still half-expect you to quit.

When I looked up at her face this time, she treated me to the most radiant smile I had ever seen—before she reached up, pulled one eyelid down, and blew me the raspberry.

This has to be my favorite exchange between them so far.

And I see you got rid of the redundant 'unlocked door' reference.

[Shades of gray]

In what sense? That every female character in my stories should be presumed gay until proven straightbi?

did I say that? no, no i didnt... so why did you jump straight to that? hmmmm?

I might have been referring to writing style.... or not

[SirMax]

That was actually quite good. I like the idea you're exploring with Shizune's lack of ability to "overhear" leaving her cut off from the undercurrents and floating rumours of the school.

[Snicket]

Emi's sudden lesbian-ism, kinda came out of left field for me. I thought you were going for one of those "unaquired/impossible love" troops that seem to popular these days. But then BAM, Emi digs chicks. Then again, up until these last few, i thought it was going to have something to do with Shizune worrying about stealing Hisao away from her. So i guess that just shows how much i can misinterpret something.

[RedSavant]

^Off-topic: I'm actually listening to 'On Melancholy Hill' right now.

On-topic: I didn't think it was so out of left field. Emi's reveal had a bit of a 'how convenient' feel to it, but that might have been because of her denial of being bisexual and Shizune's reaction to that - it's hard to describe, but it felt like a bit of an unnecessary yank on Shizune's chain. Whether on Emi's part or Goldilurks', I'm not sure. Anyway, I feel like I picked up on it before the reveal; couldn't possibly tell you any specific lines or bits I got the feeling from, it was just kind of there.

[griffon8]

With me it was Emi's reaction to Shizune's 'blackmail'. That told me Emi was interested.

Though buying Shizune the bra was a clue as well. Emi must have stared at Shizune's rack long enough to know her size…

[Rohalmen509]

*finished reading*
Sexy.

[Esquire]

Another great chapter in this little story.

When Emi said she wasn't bi, At first I was like

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Then I read on a little further and was like

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[Wan-wanniche]

@ Esquire.

EXCELLENT images.

Keep up the good work, comrade.

[Esquire]

@ Esquire.

EXCELLENT images.

Keep up the good work, comrade.

They aren't mine, They're from the Shimmie. I don't remember who drew them though. I'll have to take a hunt through

EDIT: Found it, uploaded by delta to the shimmie, not sure who the artist was. I wish I had that kind of talent!

http://shimmie.katawa-shoujo.com/post/view/168

[Petermeter]

I like where this story is going. But what I like as well is the way it came. Pretty nicely thought out, all in all. And the Shizune - well - monologue in the last part is really good. Especially coming from a somewhat win-fixed character like Shicchan.

[Goldilurks]

Arrggghhhh....I know this was answered somewhere before, but can't remember where...Is Shizune nearsighted or farsighted?

[kosherbacon]

http://ks.renai.us/viewtopic.php?f=13&t ... pia#p13465

Iirc Shizu has a mild myopia, so she uses her glasses in class to see the blackboard and so on. She can perform perfectly acceptably without them.

Nearsighted, mang.

[DaMan65]

Great story!!! Hope to read more of you stuff in the future. (Insert additional generic compliment) Just kidding I did really like it though.