I think Shizune's shoulders look slightly too broad, it feels like she could easily beat Hisao up. But considering his condition, I guess that every girl in the game could do that. Also, it feels like the left eye (right eye from the viewer) of each girl is a little off balance. And Emi's twintails are a little too far away from her head. But those are just some minor points. Overall, I like your drawings, especially Lilly's wild look. It looks like she just went through the rain with her hair still being wet.
Those drawings aren't bad. I think - like Panty Supervisor just mentioned - that the left eye of each girl is somehow distorted or something. Apart from that, Lilly looks fine to me as is. Also, IIRC, Misha had, uh, what's it called, back hair?
I agree with the criticism of the eyes, though they all seem somewhat off to me, just their left eye more so. My favorite drawing here's Lilly, followed by Hanako (some people don't put burn scars on her leg, but I think she has them there since they're covered up!).
These are awesome! There is only one complaint, that being that Rin's right eye does seem a little off, as the others said. I think it's fine with the other girls, though.
I was surprised to see that Rin had shoes on, since that would make her unable to do all of the things that she does with her feet, but then I noticed that they were the kind of shoes that can slip on and off quite easily, thus allowing her to use her feet whenever she needs to, but still protect them when she's walking around. Nice touch.
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