Sharp-O wrote:She's Mako in a more serious world but Mako all the same. Do you not remember the bald-cap?
Nope, can't remember that
. Need to rewatch the show, now...
Sharp-O wrote:*hums Everything is Awesome while writing the next chapter*
Why, you little-!
swampie2 wrote:AntonSlavik020 wrote:Not gonna lie, this is exactly the kind of thing I've stopped reading fanfics over. If I didn't like what you've already done so much I likely would. As it stands, I'm going to continue to give it a chance, but my patients for all this drama is wearing thin.
I think that all stories need points of tension like this, otherwise it'd just be sunshine and rainbows for the whole thing, that'd drag on eventually.
Thusly, I respectfully disagree with your opinion here.
Gotta say, I'm with Swampie, here. A story with only one tone or theme will normally get pretty stale. Contrast keeps a story fresh, and can also be used to emphasise the moments of genuine happiness/sadness in a story that is about the opposite. That's why we have comic relief, after all.
A good example of what I'm talking about is the storyline of
To the Moon really good story, btw. The set-up for it is largely comedy-based, with a lot of dry sarcasm, references and other such jokes tossed in there. That set-up then contrasts the tragedy in the actual storyline, thus emphasising it - suffice to say, it worked
beautifully on me
Read: I cried like a baby.
Of course, it doesn't work in
all stories, but stories with appropriate context for drama/comedy should utilise it whenever appropriate. That's my opinion, anyway. *shrug*
I am the harbinger of your destruction... By herbivorous, mountain dwelling quadrupeds...
fear me
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I also write now, apparently. Since everyone else does it, I'm putting it
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I have also discovered that I'm a decent proofreader. Anybody with SPaG problems is free to PM me their work for a thorough analysis and/or evisceration. Depends on how I'm feeling.