Dancing: A Miki pseudo-route (Update 7/30/17)

[azumeow]

Bitches love flowers, yo.

[Mirage_GSM]

Okay, the tense problems are way better in this chapter. In fact it's only the first two sentences and this part here:

..., but I didn't mind. This was the Miki I was familiar with, the one I knew.

Other stuff:

is getting worser by the day.

"Worse" is already the comparative.

The chapter was good - except for the last part. That felt a bit rushed.
He's waiting in her room with a bouquet of flowers and suddenly they're a couple?

Oh, and the olympics? Seriously?

[HoneyBakedHam]

I think it's a Juniors type of Paralympics where it's to see how they are now and gauge on the idea of possibility of them in the real deal in the future.

And we don't know what the lilies mean to Miki just yet, so we're probably to find out in a future chapter.

I just feel bad for Suzu because I can already tell she's getting heart-broken by all this since she feels like she wants Hisao more than Miki, but can't do that sort of thing to her best friend.

[AntonSlavik020]

The chapter was good - except for the last part. That felt a bit rushed.
He's waiting in her room with a bouquet of flowers and suddenly they're a couple?

Oh, and the olympics? Seriously?

I think the end didn't bother me as much because they had already confessed to each other, though it did seem a little rushed. I would have liked some more talking first.

Besides that, fun chapter. Cupid Suzu is adorable in my head.

*edit* I had forgotten about heat broken Suzu. That's what happens when you read it at 730 a.m. and post at noon during your lunch brake. And I'm surprised Hisao doesn't at least suspect something. She's given a few hints so far.

[HoneyBakedHam]

*edit* I had forgotten about heat broken Suzu. That's what happens when you read it at 730 a.m. and post at noon during your lunch brake. And I'm surprised Hisao doesn't at least suspect something. She's given a few hints so far.

This is Hisao, the classic "Master of Romance", we're talking about here, after all.

[acquireTigris]

"Worse" is already the comparative.

I was thinking about keeping "worse" instead of "worser" during the writing phase, but I think "worser" just sounds nicer, even though it isn't exactly a real word. Unless you count Shakespeare's usage of it as law.

The chapter was good - except for the last part. That felt a bit rushed.

It was rushed. But if you think about it, Hisao and Miki had a bunch of romantic tension between them prior to the flowers thing.
The flowers have plot significance, though, but we'll get to that in the future.

I'll just tweak the ending a bit because the last sentence lasting whole hours just doesn't feel right.

Oh, and the olympics? Seriously?

Plot device. And one that will get an explanation in the future as well.

*edit* I had forgotten about heat broken Suzu. That's what happens when you read it at 730 a.m. and post at noon during your lunch brake. And I'm surprised Hisao doesn't at least suspect something. She's given a few hints so far.

This is Hisao, the classic "Master of Romance", we're talking about here, after all.

Indeed. But I really feel like I'm really using this as a convenient scapegoat. XD

[brythain]

"Worse" is already the comparative.

I was thinking about keeping "worse" instead of "worser" during the writing phase, but I think "worser" just sounds nicer, even though it isn't exactly a real word. Unless you count Shakespeare's usage of it as law.

As in, "This was the most unkindest cut of all." (Julius Caesar, Act 3 Scene 2)

Actually 'worser' is the comparative of 'worse', using a more modern analysis. Some things are worse; some things are worser than those things, but not the worst.

[acquireTigris]

"Worse" is already the comparative.

I was thinking about keeping "worse" instead of "worser" during the writing phase, but I think "worser" just sounds nicer, even though it isn't exactly a real word. Unless you count Shakespeare's usage of it as law.

As in, "This was the most unkindest cut of all." (Julius Caesar, Act 3 Scene 2)

Actually 'worser' is the comparative of 'worse', using a more modern analysis. Some things are worse; some things are worser than those things, but not the worst.

Shakespeare was pretty redundant. But if he wasn't redundant, he wasn't Shakespeare.

[Mirage_GSM]

Actually 'worser' is the comparative of 'worse', using a more modern analysis. Some things are worse; some things are worser than those things, but not the worst.

By that logic "betterer" would be the comparative of "better"
You simply cannot compare a comparative. If you have a thing that is worse than another and a third thing that's worse than the two of them it's still "worse" and not "worser".
So unless Hisao is quoting Shakespeare here - which is unlikely considering his fondness for the English language - there's no reason to use that "word".

Shakespeare was pretty redundant. But if he wasn't redundant, he wasn't Shakespeare.

Now you're giving me a headache.

[brythain]

By that logic "betterer" would be the comparative of "better"
You simply cannot compare a comparative. If you have a thing that is worse than another and a third thing that's worse than the two of them it's still "worse" and not "worser".

Oh yes you can. See [this] for example.

Edit: why bother, anyway?

Ah well, I guess we can just agree to disagree, and watch Miur, Miura, Miuriest.

[HoneyBakedHam]

By that logic "betterer" would be the comparative of "better"
You simply cannot compare a comparative. If you have a thing that is worse than another and a third thing that's worse than the two of them it's still "worse" and not "worser".

Oh yes you can. See [this] for example.

Edit: why bother, anyway?

Ah well, I guess we can just agree to disagree, and watch Miur, Miura, Miuriest.

I feel like Rin right now thinking about " Miki being her Mikiest". Damn you, Armless Autistic Artist.

[Remuz]

Another great chapter, loving this story. Keep up the good work

[acquireTigris]

I've edited Mei Kawashima's name to Mei Kawanami. She isn't my OC and after contact with her owner, I had to fix this mistake in order to do her justice. Shout out to you, Rozy!

In other news, the next update will probably be published either late January or early February, later if things IRL don't get steady. Hopefully Act 3 will have a good start!

[HoneyBakedHam]

Hey, something I just realized: You might wanna change Special Olympics to Paralympics, seeing as she's physically handicapped and not mentally.

Just thought I'd mention that now before the event got mentioned more and more.

[acquireTigris]

Hey, something I just realized: You might wanna change Special Olympics to Paralympics, seeing as she's physically handicapped and not mentally.

Just thought I'd mention that now before the event got mentioned more and more.

That makes more sense. I'll be sure to change that up once I can get access to an actual computer, because I'm having some trouble with using one at the moment.