I have to admit I don't understand most of this piece, so I've refrained from making substantive comments of any kind.Silentcook wrote:If you have to ask whether someone understood something in your writing, then you should not leave that something in, ever.
Steel [We're on the third chapter now!]
Re: Steel [We're on the third chapter now!]
Post-Yamaku, what happens? After The Dream is a mosaic that follows everyone to the (sometimes) bitter end.
Main Index (Complete)—Shizune/Lilly/Emi/Hanako/Rin/Misha + Miki + Natsume
Secondary Arcs: Rika/Mutou/Akira • Hideaki | Others (WIP): Straw—A Dream of Suzu • Sakura—The Kenji Saga.
"Much has been lost, and there is much left to lose." — Tim Powers, The Drawing of the Dark (1979)
Main Index (Complete)—Shizune/Lilly/Emi/Hanako/Rin/Misha + Miki + Natsume
Secondary Arcs: Rika/Mutou/Akira • Hideaki | Others (WIP): Straw—A Dream of Suzu • Sakura—The Kenji Saga.
"Much has been lost, and there is much left to lose." — Tim Powers, The Drawing of the Dark (1979)
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GodlyVirus
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Re: Steel [We're on the third chapter now!]
Ahhh man... now I have to take out the Mahou Shoujo scence... now I'm all kinds of depressed... no... I'll leave it in... it doesn't make sense even if you know what he's saying. *Accomplished Fan Fiction Writer*
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Mirage_GSM
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Re: Steel [We're on the third chapter now!]
The only reference I thought I got was the one to drug abuse, but that was apparently not intentional.
I know nothing about Dora the Explorer, except that people are paid to impersonate her in amusement parks.
I know nothing about Dora the Explorer, except that people are paid to impersonate her in amusement parks.
Emi > Misha > Hanako > Lilly > Rin > Shizune
My collected KS-Fan Fictions: Mirage's Myths
My collected KS-Fan Fictions: Mirage's Myths
Sore wa himitsu desu.griffon8 wrote:Kosher, just because sex is your answer to everything doesn't mean that sex is the answer to everything.
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GodlyVirus
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GodlyVirus
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Re: Steel [We're on the third chapter now!]
Hey hey! I'm back after speaking French. though to be fair I was never gone because I was using a differ... I mean, I was a lurker. Yes... A lurker... A lurker who put up with Creepypasta's editing format for a grand total of 2 minutes to write his story... So what was the lesson or even basic importance to this thread? All future parts of Steel will now be in French.
"Je plaisante,"
Also my signature has been changed to relect the new character development, take it as you wish.
"Je suis en train banni pour cela, Ne suis-je?"
Translation (Provided for Moderator's lesiure):
"I'm kidding,"
" I'm getting banned for this, aren't I?"
(USER WAS PERMABANNED FOR THIS POST: BAN EVASION)
"Je plaisante,"
Also my signature has been changed to relect the new character development, take it as you wish.
"Je suis en train banni pour cela, Ne suis-je?"
Translation (Provided for Moderator's lesiure):
"I'm kidding,"
" I'm getting banned for this, aren't I?"
(USER WAS PERMABANNED FOR THIS POST: BAN EVASION)
veut avouer sa flamme à Silentcook