Yeah, I've noticed some myself when i was reading itTheCatBeyondSpace! wrote:I'm not very good with critiques (Just ask lorsquirrel for confirmation.), So I'll just say that it was enjoyable with a couple of spelling errors.Comrade wrote:That aside, how good/bad/horrible this chapter was?
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Re: Zombies - Updated 02/09/13
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Re: Zombies - Updated 02/09/13
I ran you story through a text editing program I use for work, and came up with the following:
10 * I recoil back from his outstretched hand "Whoa, take that thing away from me! I might accidently get injured or something."
* I recoil back from his outstretched hand "Whoa, take that thing away from me! I might accidentally get injured or something."
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22 * "umm, I kinda slept through the whole day, I guess it is some sort of side effects from my medication." I say, embarrassed. Did I really managed to sleep through a zombie outbreak? That is, if Kenji's correct in his assumptions.
* "Uum, I kinda slept through the whole day, I guess it is some sort of side effects from my medication." I say, embarrassed. Did I really managed to sleep through a zombie outbreak? That is, if Kenji's correct in his assumptions.
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61 * We are at the top of the stairs, Kenji leads the way with a axe in one hand and is signaling me towards him with the other.
* We are at the top of the stairs, Kenji leads the way with an axe in one hand and is signaling me towards him with the other.
62 * Kenji whispers when I'm within earshot
* Kenji whispers when I'm within earshot.
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10 * I recoil back from his outstretched hand "Whoa, take that thing away from me! I might accidently get injured or something."
* I recoil back from his outstretched hand "Whoa, take that thing away from me! I might accidentally get injured or something."
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22 * "umm, I kinda slept through the whole day, I guess it is some sort of side effects from my medication." I say, embarrassed. Did I really managed to sleep through a zombie outbreak? That is, if Kenji's correct in his assumptions.
* "Uum, I kinda slept through the whole day, I guess it is some sort of side effects from my medication." I say, embarrassed. Did I really managed to sleep through a zombie outbreak? That is, if Kenji's correct in his assumptions.
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61 * We are at the top of the stairs, Kenji leads the way with a axe in one hand and is signaling me towards him with the other.
* We are at the top of the stairs, Kenji leads the way with an axe in one hand and is signaling me towards him with the other.
62 * Kenji whispers when I'm within earshot
* Kenji whispers when I'm within earshot.
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Re: Zombies - Updated 02/09/13
Insufficient data for meaningful response.
get the refernece, get the reference. . . .
get the refernece, get the reference. . . .
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Re: Zombies - Updated 02/09/13
Sorry, no luck this time around.Sea wrote:Insufficient data for meaningful response.
get the refernece, get the reference. . . .
On related news, i figured out that word wasn't the problem after all. It was just me being thick.
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I don't know if this was supposed to be funny, but i kept laughing anyway
Re: Zombies - Updated 02/09/13
I'm not sure how serious i want it to be, right now I'm giving it a light hearted tone. It might take a turn into a dark ally in the futureTacticalBacon wrote:I don't know if this was supposed to be funny, but i kept laughing anyway
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Re: Zombies - Updated 02/09/13
Read this. If I ever tried to write this is about how it'd look.Comrade wrote:Sorry, no luck this time around.Sea wrote:Insufficient data for meaningful response.
get the refernece, get the reference. . . .
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Re: Zombies - Updated 02/09/13
Too many wordsSea wrote:Read this. If I ever tried to write this is about how it'd look.Comrade wrote:Sorry, no luck this time around.Sea wrote:Insufficient data for meaningful response.
get the refernece, get the reference. . . .
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Re: Zombies - Updated 02/09/13
You should read it anyway.
It is one of the greatest stories by one of the greatest authors of all time.
Though, personally, I think Superiority is his best story...
It is one of the greatest stories by one of the greatest authors of all time.
Though, personally, I think Superiority is his best story...
Emi > Misha > Hanako > Lilly > Rin > Shizune
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Fascinating stuff. Perhaps I should look into more of his writing.Sea wrote:Read this. If I ever tried to write this is about how it'd look.
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Re: Zombies - Updated 02/09/13
It's got it's merits, but I still like that one because of it's span. Also it's really close to Vacuum Diagrams, my favorite book. (The title is not at all indicative of the content)Mirage_GSM wrote:You should read it anyway.
It is one of the greatest stories by one of the greatest authors of all time.
Though, personally, I think Superiority is his best story...
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Re: Zombies - Updated 02/09/13
Are you guys Done yet?
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Re: Zombies - Updated 02/09/13
Like you haven't started a random tangent before. And this is what we do while we wait for more words.Comrade wrote:Are you guys Done yet?
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Re: Zombies - Updated 02/09/13
If this happens, i will find you. And i will castrate you. With a rubberband and paperclip. Just like back on the farm. Nobody kills my waifu or gets her killed and lives to tell about it... And with that out of the way, I'm digging this story. Hoping for more of a comedic route, but it's your story to write as you will.TheCatBeyondSpace! wrote:Five bucks says he just killed Hanako.
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Re: Zombies - Updated 02/09/13
:3motokid108 wrote:If this happens, i will find you. And i will castrate you. With a rubberband and paperclip. Just like back on the farm. Nobody kills my waifu or gets her killed and lives to tell about it... And with that out of the way, I'm digging this story. Hoping for more of a comedic route, but it's your story to write as you will.TheCatBeyondSpace! wrote:Five bucks says he just killed Hanako.
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