I never thought of thread as being particularly noisy. Yarn, on the other hand, will keep you up half the night chattering about the smallest of details.Reese8 wrote:This thread got quiet rather suddenly.
"French are just Spanish Germans, therefore Mexicans."Sea wrote:Comrade, as Khan Bek has convinced me to give Democracy a try.
I am dreading writing that. It will happen; soonish, even, and it will be more than just a one-time thing, but I'm pretty sure Rin fans won't think I'm giving her enough credit.TheCatBeyondSpace! wrote:I can't wait to see how a conversation between Iwanako, and Rin, goes.
Aw shucks. Now I feel like one nitpicky bastard. Me and my editorial, perfectionist tendencies.Mirage_GSM wrote:I didn't have any problems with the previous version, but if you ask me, this is better.
AntonSlavik020 wrote:I also looking forward to her first meeting with Lilly. Something tells me they will get along quite well.
I think I've speculated on these two somewhere on my long-winded babblings a few pages back. Something about the problem being in Iwanako's bra? Which, in a way, it is. But still.TheCatBeyondSpace! wrote:I can't wait to see how a conversation between Iwanako, and Rin, goes.
If it's of any consolation, this sentence reads fairly Rin-ish already. Or at least, it reminds me of when Rin procrastinates over the mural. Getting into character so soon, are we?Leaty wrote: I am dreading writing that. It will happen; soonish, even, and it will be more than just a one-time thing, but I'm pretty sure Rin fans won't think I'm giving her enough credit.
Miracle?Bad Apple wrote:Aw shucks. Now I feel like one nitpicky bastard. Me and my editorial, perfectionist tendencies.Miracle_GSM wrote:...
Sore wa himitsu desu.griffon8 wrote:Kosher, just because sex is your answer to everything doesn't mean that sex is the answer to everything.
Err, it's still important to first-timers I guess, I think keeping the shock / twist is still the best.Leaty wrote: So, my question is: how important is the shock of the first chapter to a reader's enjoyment of the fic? As the writer, I don't personally know this. When I wrote it a year ago, it was just a proof-of-concept, so the stinger was fairly important, but now this is becoming a full-fledged fic, and I'm wondering if maybe I should stop fooling myself. Should I be more open about the fact that this is a story about Iwanako having Hisao's condition?
"French are just Spanish Germans, therefore Mexicans."Sea wrote:Comrade, as Khan Bek has convinced me to give Democracy a try.
"French are just Spanish Germans, therefore Mexicans."Sea wrote:Comrade, as Khan Bek has convinced me to give Democracy a try.
…I never suspected that it was meant to be a shock, sorry; I thought that it was a device to make people think about the story and thus be slightly drawn in before even reading it. I mean, the wording of the description is a bit vague, which always makes one suspicious, and the title is Divergence; by themselves, the title could maybe imply just a non-game route and the description that the story was written from the other party's perspective, but the association of the title with the description lead me to immediately assume "Oh, neat, a fic where Iwanako was the one with the heart condition". Opening the story was just confirmation and the nice discovery that the interesting concept was paired with good execution (something that is sadly not universal, and I always hate finding out that a fascinating idea was wasted more than discovering that the author of "Uthornamealay the 17-year-old war hero/firefighter/pro gamer goes to Yamaku and gets all the girls" has never heard of commas).Leaty wrote:So, my question is: how important is the shock of the first chapter to a reader's enjoyment of the fic? As the writer, I don't personally know this. When I wrote it a year ago, it was just a proof-of-concept, so the stinger was fairly important, but now this is becoming a full-fledged fic, and I'm wondering if maybe I should stop fooling myself. Should I be more open about the fact that this is a story about Iwanako having Hisao's condition?
For me, the shock comes when you see how differently the problem effects Iwanako versus Hisao. Going into the story, you realize what's happening after the first few paragraphs, so having that particular detail in the description doesn't take much away--at least I don't think it does, anyway.Leaty wrote:I don't want anything done right yet. I want to hear what people think.
Ah, the penultimate iteration of wish-fulfillment fan fiction, complete with an unflappable social genius possessing a 4.0 GPA, who won the Olympics twice in a row and got sent to Yamaku because of a stubbed toe, as interpreted by a literary-inept teenage underachiever with delusions of grandeur--we should all strive to write such amazingly predictable, completely meaningless drivel."Uthornamealay the 17-year-old war hero/firefighter/pro gamer goes to Yamaku and gets all the girls"
