How flattering of you to ask... but no, I'm just being meticulous with Photoshop.ArcCain wrote:Most impressive, but what dose FTFY stand for?
Furry Tentacle Fetish Yaoi?
Are you moding the game?Tang wrote:Impressive at the very least to see that I've indirectly inspired this...
Anyhow, I want you to print this out and frame it on your wall to keep you motivated until you're done with your little project.
Exceeder (Miki X Emi) {Updated 4/1}
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Re: Exceeder (Miki X Emi) {Updated 3/10}
Hey! I've read that story!OtakuNinja wrote:Choice boxes are only a good idea if the choices lead to different chapters, e.g. as seen in Shower Scenes.Umber wrote:And, aw. I was hoping the choice boxes would work better than they normally do. It was worth a shot.
In my completely unbiased opinion, it's may be one of the greatest shower themed stories every written for this forum!
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Re: Exceeder (Miki X Emi) {Updated 3/10}
That's a shameless plugin if I ever saw one.Oddball wrote:Hey! I've read that story!OtakuNinja wrote:Choice boxes are only a good idea if the choices lead to different chapters, e.g. as seen in Shower Scenes.Umber wrote:And, aw. I was hoping the choice boxes would work better than they normally do. It was worth a shot.
In my completely unbiased opinion, it's may be one of the greatest shower themed stories every written for this forum!
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Re: Exceeder (Miki X Emi) {Updated 3/10}
Someone's a shameless self-promoterOddball wrote:Hey! I've read that story!OtakuNinja wrote:Choice boxes are only a good idea if the choices lead to different chapters, e.g. as seen in Shower Scenes.Umber wrote:And, aw. I was hoping the choice boxes would work better than they normally do. It was worth a shot.
In my completely unbiased opinion, it's may be one of the greatest shower themed stories every written for this forum!
But I do have to agree, since to my knowledge its the ONLY shower-themed story on the forums XD
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Re: Exceeder (Miki X Emi) {Updated 3/10}
someone will have to change that. (not me!)
Re: Exceeder (Miki X Emi) {Updated 3/10}
I did not mind the choice box.
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Re: Exceeder (Miki X Emi) {Updated 3/10}
You people are going to enjoy the puns hidden throughout the story. . There's already one in a title somewhere, and it won't be the last
I am the PUNGEON MASTER! (oh god, someone stop me XD)
I am the PUNGEON MASTER! (oh god, someone stop me XD)
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KeiichiO wrote:You shall now, and forever be known as, "Steinherz, The Great".
Oddball wrote:It's an obvious mistake. Both are disfigured orphans that read alot and both wear green skirts.
Re: Exceeder (Miki X Emi) {Updated 3/10}
The choice box actually felt like internal monologue to me. Because I know those situations, where you can literally see the choice flashing by in slow-motion, and your choice is already selected. And all the smart ones are not.
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Re: Exceeder (Miki X Emi) {Updated 3/10}
Why would you PUNish us like that?Steinherz wrote:You people are going to enjoy the puns hidden throughout the story. . There's already one in a title somewhere, and it won't be the last
I am the PUNGEON MASTER! (oh god, someone stop me XD)
It has begun
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Re: Exceeder (Miki X Emi) {Updated 3/10}
Hoitash wrote:Why would you PUNish us like that?Steinherz wrote:You people are going to enjoy the puns hidden throughout the story. . There's already one in a title somewhere, and it won't be the last
I am the PUNGEON MASTER! (oh god, someone stop me XD)
It has begun
well crap....
Re: Exceeder (Miki X Emi) {Updated 3/10}
Very nice. I agree with others that this is the strongest chapter yet.
BTW, the you duplicated the post. The last post on page three of this thread is identical to the first post on page four. It greatly confused me for a moment, because after I read the end of page three, I went back to confirm that you hadn't used silly choices before. Then I went to page four and went "Huh? Didn't I just read this?"
Mirage, about your point in Miki's internal monologue invalidating the other two choices, that's actually what Hisao does if you choose "Go for a walk into town." in Sip (Part 2). The next page has him thinking, "Following Hanako to the library seems a bit intrusive. There was a reason she left the classroom, after all." So I think it's normal to discount the results of other decisions once you've made a decision. I think this is a result of confirmation bias, the tendency to ignore data against your position and hype up data supporting your position.
Wow, didn't mean to get all psychological and introspective there. Anyway.
TLDR: I like where this is going, the last chapter was duplicated, and please don't include any more choice points.
BTW, the you duplicated the post. The last post on page three of this thread is identical to the first post on page four. It greatly confused me for a moment, because after I read the end of page three, I went back to confirm that you hadn't used silly choices before. Then I went to page four and went "Huh? Didn't I just read this?"
Mirage, about your point in Miki's internal monologue invalidating the other two choices, that's actually what Hisao does if you choose "Go for a walk into town." in Sip (Part 2). The next page has him thinking, "Following Hanako to the library seems a bit intrusive. There was a reason she left the classroom, after all." So I think it's normal to discount the results of other decisions once you've made a decision. I think this is a result of confirmation bias, the tendency to ignore data against your position and hype up data supporting your position.
Wow, didn't mean to get all psychological and introspective there. Anyway.
TLDR: I like where this is going, the last chapter was duplicated, and please don't include any more choice points.
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Re: Exceeder (Miki X Emi) {Updated 3/10}
Thank you, that has been fixed, and we won't XD.griffon8 wrote:TLDR: I like where this is going, the last chapter was duplicated, and please don't include any more choice points.
Expect the next chapter this week (or tonight).
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Oddball wrote:It's an obvious mistake. Both are disfigured orphans that read alot and both wear green skirts.
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It's one thing to rationalize your decision to yourself after you made it. The decision could have easily gone the other way instead.griffon8 wrote:Mirage, about your point in Miki's internal monologue invalidating the other two choices, that's actually what Hisao does if you choose "Go for a walk into town." in Sip (Part 2). The next page has him thinking, "Following Hanako to the library seems a bit intrusive. There was a reason she left the classroom, after all." So I think it's normal to discount the results of other decisions once you've made a decision.
But in this case, two of the three choices would have been physically impossible anyway, so why include the choice in the first place?
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Re: Exceeder (Miki X Emi) {Updated 3/10} (erotic content ahe
I thought it was meant as a joke element. Like the text on the surrounding areas in Zombieland. Miki sees the scene freeze, the choice appears in a Final Fantasy VII menu style, the selection is made, then the scene resumes.
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Re: Exceeder (Miki X Emi) {Updated 3/10} (erotic content ahe
I think that's what Umber meant for it. I had nothing to do with the choices there.Carighan wrote:I thought it was meant as a joke element. Like the text on the surrounding areas in Zombieland, you could see the scene freeze, the choice appearing in a Final Fantasy VII menu style, the selection being made, then the scene resumes.
Actually, that's a perfect description of it
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KeiichiO wrote:You shall now, and forever be known as, "Steinherz, The Great".
Oddball wrote:It's an obvious mistake. Both are disfigured orphans that read alot and both wear green skirts.