Of Arms, Legs, and Hooves

[TheHouseholdWarrior]

So I was doing nothing and being idle for hours on end, and this idea came to mind.

It's a Friendship is Magic/Katawa Shoujo crossover, and it takes place right during the summer holiday right after Emi's good ending, but is mostly centered around Rin (although the story isn't told from her perspective).

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/53148/O ... and-Hooves

Comments and criticism is appreciated, either here or on fimfiction.

Thanks!

[kulkukan]

I... hate. simple. pure. and justified hate.

[George Da Moose]

This is promising.
Very promising.
I'll expect the next chapter to have Hisao riding Twilight Sparkle while Emi has her way with Rainbow Dash and Applejack.
Don't disappoint me.

[Yellow 13]

>mfw poines

[TheHouseholdWarrior]

I... hate. simple. pure. and justified hate.

Justified...?
If it's about the fact that there are ponies in them, then don't reply. I don't want to start a fight.
If its about my writing style, characterization, grammar, or anything actually related to telling the story itself, then please tell me frankly what you feel about them. Because I need to improve myself and my writing in as many ways as possible.
Thanks.

[TheHouseholdWarrior]

This is promising.
Very promising.
I'll expect the next chapter to have Hisao riding Twilight Sparkle while Emi has her way with Rainbow Dash and Applejack.
Don't disappoint me.

Just give it a minute...

[Bi-Polar Hernandez]

>ponies

WE DID IT.

WE FUCKING DID IT.

WE HIT BRONY TIER. I TOLD YOU MOTHERFUCKERS THAT THIS WOULD HAPPEN BUT NO ONE LISTENED.

[Sgt_Frog]

Aw, I was expecting the girls to be ponified. Equestria has mental disorders by the dozens ("Party of One", "Lesson Zero", that institutionalized pony in "Read It And Weep") but very few physically handicapped ponies.

[Jack of H3arts]

>ponies

WE DID IT.

WE FUCKING DID IT.

WE HIT BRONY TIER. I TOLD YOU MOTHERFUCKERS THAT THIS WOULD HAPPEN BUT NO ONE LISTENED.

Okay, okay, I don't mean to sound like a dick, but you do seem inordinately upset.

[Guest90206]

I...


I... uh...


I don't...


...fuck it, I'll read it.

EDIT: DAMMIT I CAN'T STOP READING IT WHAT THE FUCK DID YOU DO TO ME

[Ruthalas]

I wait with baited breath for the next chapter HouseholdWarrior!

Don't forget us!

[griffon8]

"Oh great," I thought. "Another new post on a thread that hasn't updated in over eight months.

"Why won't they learn… wait, the story is hosted elsewhere? And the last update was at the end of March?"

But I won't be reading it anyway. There are limits to what I can take in a crossover, and this goes waaaaaaay beyond that point.

[forgetmenot]

But I won't be reading it anyway. There are limits to what I can take in a crossover, and this goes waaaaaaay beyond that point.

Agreed. My disbelief is far to heavy to be suspended. At this rate, it'd collapse the brooklyn bridge if hung from the bottom.

[KeiichiO]

Pffft.

Close-minded fools.

[Suox]

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