A pseudo-pseudo Suzu route (completed)

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Bi-Polar Hernandez wrote:Fun Fact: Your body supposedly releases the chemical DMT when you die, the same chemical that you release while dreaming.
That makes Suzu's death so much more depressing.
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Image "He wouldn't wake up...The one time he actually needed me and I wasn't there for him!”

The Suzu quote comes from this.

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AlchemistR wrote:
Bi-Polar Hernandez wrote:Fun Fact: Your body supposedly releases the chemical DMT when you die, the same chemical that you release while dreaming.
That makes Suzu's death so much more depressing.
Couldn't help pointing it out. Not sure if it was intentional or not.
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Bi-Polar Hernandez wrote:
AlchemistR wrote:
Bi-Polar Hernandez wrote:Fun Fact: Your body supposedly releases the chemical DMT when you die, the same chemical that you release while dreaming.
That makes Suzu's death so much more depressing.
Couldn't help pointing it out. Not sure if it was intentional or not.
Still. I am depressed now. ;____;
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Image "He wouldn't wake up...The one time he actually needed me and I wasn't there for him!”

The Suzu quote comes from this.

Hanako>Suzu>Rin>Lilly=Miki=Emi>Misha>Shizune

Snoozu and Miki need routes. As do Kenji and Jigoro. No homo.
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I hope it is okay if i don't do a doodle for this chapter.


...;~;
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Doomish wrote:I hope it is okay if i don't do a doodle for this chapter.


...;~;
A drawing of Suzu on the roof with Death looking at her blood spattered body would be very cool.

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Bi-Polar Hernandez wrote: Fun Fact: Your body supposedly releases the chemical DMT when you die, the same chemical that you release while dreaming.
T-that's not a FUN fact at all ;_;

See I was thinking that she had gone up there of her own will being all depressed - Stupidly despite her narcolespy - And the dream secquence started with her hearing Seiji (As has happened previously) which in turn caused her to fall and stuff.
I don't know where exactly the spot on the roof leads to but I'd like think someone there would be a little noticable, but we don't really know that from KS


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Oh man. Why did I read this. Why am I crying - oh wait I'm not. Not even Katawa Shoujo can do that. But I did make this. Apologies to Doomish for blatantly ripping off his Death art. I just really like his "guffawing" face. Feel free to draw it better as payment or something. So yeah.

Shut up Death! Oh wait, I'm Death...

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So at first I didn't understand the ending.

Then I went back and re-read it.

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I don't think she sleepwalked up there at all. She went there on purpose, just waiting for her condition to drop her off the side so it wouldn't technically be suicide.
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Well, then. Once my tears dried I drew this! Tablets don't work so well when there's moisture all over the pressure pad.

Edit: And a version without the fence in the way.

I know it wasn't the embodiment of Death at that point but >that feel when I can't be bothered to draw Seiji properly.
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AverageRob wrote:
Bi-Polar Hernandez wrote: Fun Fact: Your body supposedly releases the chemical DMT when you die, the same chemical that you release while dreaming.
T-that's not a FUN fact at all ;_;

See I was thinking that she had gone up there of her own will being all depressed - Stupidly despite her narcolespy - And the dream secquence started with her hearing Seiji (As has happened previously) which in turn caused her to fall and stuff.
I don't know where exactly the spot on the roof leads to but I'd like think someone there would be a little noticable, but we don't really know that from KS


Trying to play detective with Scissorlips' mind is a tricky affair indeed.
I went back and changed it to something more proper.
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There. I did it. Now I can sleep.
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Uuugh.. damn it. I feel sad for some reason.
Bi-Polar Hernandez wrote: HORRIBLY DEPRESSING Fact
That's better. Now I need to shed a tear or two.
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Why are you all spamming spoiler tags? Anyone who has read the thread to this point will also have read the story. (And if they read comments first, they only have themselves to blame.)

I see no indication of suicide. In a story that is PoV of the character in question there should be some kind of intention visible.

Oh, and since I forgot to mention it in my last post: The final scene was beautifully written. It's just the events leading up to it that I had issues with.
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Good job Scissorlips on handling the bad/neutral end.
I did wonder how you would handle a branching end, and in the end I'm glad you kept it simple.

And I agree with Mirage_GSM partially. She went with suicidal intentions, it's just that you don't see it because the scene is a cut. It's possible that she was already dead by the time the third part started. (that was my interpretation)
However, her death would be caused by her narcolepsy, probably.
Hard to say. I'll attempt a second read-through later.

and I like BlackWaltz's picture best. I suspect I'll laugh at it once I get over this story.
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