Iron Oxide (Abandoned)
Posted: Sun Nov 17, 2013 5:13 pm
Oxides of iron are extremely useful substances. They are used to store information. They are used as pigments. They are used for polishing. One of them is even medically useful. However, oxidation of iron can also be destructive.
NekoDude gets an editing credit for this, for what it's worth. He's helped out with a lot of ideas, too.
Table of Contents Update 2014-05-02: Fuck it, I haven't had the inclination to do anything on this story since December. It's dead, Jim.
A quick outline of where I was going to take things:
Hanako and Hisao's conflict was ultimately because Hisao wanted kids, Hanako was terrified of the idea, and that's where their communication breakdown started
Hanako was going to drunkenly get Akira (who was on a business trip to Sendai) to >Comfort Hanako, Akira was going to reject her
This was route-scale, and Hanako and Hisao were going to break up, realizing their differences weren't reconcilable, by about chapter 9, which would mark the end of Act 1
Lilly left Japan as she did in her own route, because she realized that she had feelings for Hisao, and felt that she needed to be on another continent to not be tempted to act on them
Act 2 would focus on Hanako coming to terms with her swinging both ways, and dating Akira - was going to have a fight after Hanako tried to pass Akira off as her boyfriend
Acts 3 and 4 would focus on Akira's alcoholism and family issues
In the background, Lilly would eventually come to Japan and start dating Hisao
An epilogue would show Hanako and Akira happily married (Akira having become a UK citizen by that time, and the timeline long enough that gay marriage would have been legalized, and Japan recognizes foreign gay marriages), and Lilly and Hisao also happily married, and celebrating the birth of their first child
Here's the problem... I was doing this because I wanted to see Hanako and Akira together, and I also wanted to explore what would happen when Hanako and Hisao's relationship falls apart. Someone else kinda did the Hanako x Akira thing, and in a way that I quite like, although it does present problems that my idea does not. But, I think that's why I completely lost the spark - I saw what I wanted to see, and lost the motivation to make it happen myself.
I actually did write out to chapter 7 or so, and Emi was going to be prominent early on as well (Hanako and Emi having become friends, although with an element of jealousy on Hanako's part). But, I wasn't satisfied with where things were going.
NekoDude gets an editing credit for this, for what it's worth. He's helped out with a lot of ideas, too.
Table of Contents Update 2014-05-02: Fuck it, I haven't had the inclination to do anything on this story since December. It's dead, Jim.
A quick outline of where I was going to take things:
Hanako and Hisao's conflict was ultimately because Hisao wanted kids, Hanako was terrified of the idea, and that's where their communication breakdown started
Hanako was going to drunkenly get Akira (who was on a business trip to Sendai) to >Comfort Hanako, Akira was going to reject her
This was route-scale, and Hanako and Hisao were going to break up, realizing their differences weren't reconcilable, by about chapter 9, which would mark the end of Act 1
Lilly left Japan as she did in her own route, because she realized that she had feelings for Hisao, and felt that she needed to be on another continent to not be tempted to act on them
Act 2 would focus on Hanako coming to terms with her swinging both ways, and dating Akira - was going to have a fight after Hanako tried to pass Akira off as her boyfriend
Acts 3 and 4 would focus on Akira's alcoholism and family issues
In the background, Lilly would eventually come to Japan and start dating Hisao
An epilogue would show Hanako and Akira happily married (Akira having become a UK citizen by that time, and the timeline long enough that gay marriage would have been legalized, and Japan recognizes foreign gay marriages), and Lilly and Hisao also happily married, and celebrating the birth of their first child
Here's the problem... I was doing this because I wanted to see Hanako and Akira together, and I also wanted to explore what would happen when Hanako and Hisao's relationship falls apart. Someone else kinda did the Hanako x Akira thing, and in a way that I quite like, although it does present problems that my idea does not. But, I think that's why I completely lost the spark - I saw what I wanted to see, and lost the motivation to make it happen myself.
I actually did write out to chapter 7 or so, and Emi was going to be prominent early on as well (Hanako and Emi having become friends, although with an element of jealousy on Hanako's part). But, I wasn't satisfied with where things were going.