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Re: Developments (Post-Lilly Bad End) [Ch 23 up 11/3]

Posted: Mon Nov 04, 2013 3:07 pm
by forgetmenot
edruil wrote:threesome pls. I can't handle the feels if one of them gets rejected.

But for real, let me echo the sentiments already expressed by a few other readers. This is really well done, and despite my loyalty to Emi, I can't help but pull for both of them. I think no matter which girl Hisao chooses in the end (or whether he goes for a harem route :roll: ), you're going to have some very upset fans!
The only obvious ending is that he rejects both Hanako and Emi and makes sweet, sweet love to Kenji. Or Mutou.

Re: Developments (Post-Lilly Bad End) [Ch 23 up 11/3]

Posted: Mon Nov 04, 2013 3:10 pm
by AntonSlavik020
forgetmenot wrote: The only obvious ending is that he rejects both Hanako and Emi and makes sweet, sweet love to Kenji. Or Mutou.
Or Kenji AND Mutou.

Re: Developments (Post-Lilly Bad End) [Ch 23 up 11/3]

Posted: Mon Nov 04, 2013 4:12 pm
by Solistor
AntonSlavik020 wrote:
forgetmenot wrote: The only obvious ending is that he rejects both Hanako and Emi and makes sweet, sweet love to Kenji. Or Mutou.
Or Kenji AND Mutou.
Scandalous.

Re: Developments (Post-Lilly Bad End) [Ch 23 up 11/3]

Posted: Mon Nov 04, 2013 4:19 pm
by sanduba
Damn, I have to remember to read the comments only after I read the chapter.

Re: Developments (Post-Lilly Bad End) [Ch 23 up 11/3]

Posted: Mon Nov 04, 2013 7:50 pm
by Guestimate
So.... What was Yuuko doing?

Re: Developments (Post-Lilly Bad End) [Ch 23 up 11/3]

Posted: Mon Nov 04, 2013 8:45 pm
by dewelar
Guestimate wrote:So.... What was Yuuko doing?
Are you sure you want to know ;) ? If so...

Just thought I'd have a fun moment showing her being buried under all the books being returned on the last day the library is open. Totally unrealistic, I know. Shame on me. :D

Re: Developments (Post-Lilly Bad End) [Ch 23 up 11/3]

Posted: Mon Nov 04, 2013 10:27 pm
by Lost In The Fire
Damn. The last two chapters were definitely intense. I found the nightmare from Ch 22 fairly painful to read and the scene with Emi and Hanako in the library was very intense.
Over all I am still pulling for Hanako at this point, but as with everyone else here I can't say I want to see Emi rejected either.

Still am waiting to see how you bring Shizune back into the mix. If it is anything like the story so far it will most likely be great.

Re: Developments (Post-Lilly Bad End) [Ch 23 up 11/3]

Posted: Mon Nov 04, 2013 10:36 pm
by Oscar Wildecat
Who knows, maybe in an unexpected plot twist, we'll get an Emi x Hanako wedding, with Hisao as the best man.... :wink:

Re: Developments (Post-Lilly Bad End) [Ch 23 up 11/3]

Posted: Tue Nov 05, 2013 11:18 am
by Carighan
Obviously this will end with Hisao's death and Hanako and Emi later moving in together while they go to university and slowly get over it. Right? Right? Right? :P

Re: Developments (Post-Lilly Bad End) [Ch 23 up 11/3]

Posted: Tue Nov 05, 2013 7:35 pm
by dewelar
Lost In The Fire wrote:Damn. The last two chapters were definitely intense. I found the nightmare from Ch 22 fairly painful to read and the scene with Emi and Hanako in the library was very intense.
Over all I am still pulling for Hanako at this point, but as with everyone else here I can't say I want to see Emi rejected either.

Still am waiting to see how you bring Shizune back into the mix. If it is anything like the story so far it will most likely be great.
Glad to hear the nightmare sequence came off the right way. I was a bit concerned about it, having never written one before. I was also nervous, given that in canon Hanako has pretty intense nightmares, of writing something that would come off as too milquetoast in comparison.

You can think of these past couple of chapters as the end of this act of the story, I think. The next few chapters are going to be a bit slower by comparison. And, yes, the next chapter will officially see the return of Shizune and Misha. I will admit that I am finding writing for them...challenging, but I will try my best to be up to the task :) .

Re: Developments (Post-Lilly Bad End) [Ch 23 up 11/3]

Posted: Wed Nov 06, 2013 12:05 am
by sanduba
I'm sure you'll do a great job.

Re: Developments (Post-Lilly Bad End) [Ch 23 up 11/3]

Posted: Wed Nov 06, 2013 7:33 am
by bhtooefr
Slower? Oh god the agony!

(I trust that your pacing will work well, it's been excellent so far.)

Like someone said, June 2015...

And, I wonder if that'll spoil something.

Both Emi and Hanako are the type to move fast when an opportunity presents itself (in more ways than one). However, one of them has more endurance than the other. I'm actually not sure who it is, either - normally I'd say Emi, but Hanako did put up with a month of Lilly dating Hisao, while she was still close with him, without complaint.

Re: Developments (Post-Lilly Bad End) [Ch 23 up 11/3]

Posted: Wed Nov 06, 2013 12:03 pm
by dewelar
bhtooefr wrote:Both Emi and Hanako are the type to move fast when an opportunity presents itself (in more ways than one). However, one of them has more endurance than the other. I'm actually not sure who it is, either - normally I'd say Emi, but Hanako did put up with a month of Lilly dating Hisao, while she was still close with him, without complaint.
*nods* I would say endurance is a trait both Emi and Hanako have in spades.

Re: Developments (Post-Lilly Bad End) [Ch 23 up 11/3]

Posted: Wed Nov 06, 2013 5:41 pm
by Kurara
In that case, I feel sorry for Hisao. :wink:

Re: Developments (Post-Lilly Bad End) [Ch 23 up 11/3]

Posted: Wed Nov 06, 2013 5:45 pm
by bhtooefr
In that case, for Hisao's sake, I'd recommend he go for Hanako.

Emi strikes me as the type that would demand multiple endurance sessions a day.

:lol: