A thought about Shizune's Path
Posted: Sat Jan 12, 2013 5:29 am
My issues are likely entirely personal problems with how the story is going so far, but I'd still like to hear some discussion. (PLEASE spoiler if it's past Shizune act 2 or in another path)
OK. So I had this great idea in act 1 about Shizune and Hisao eventually learning to communicate through sign language. I thought about it during my first playthrough when Misha once mentioned how exhausted she was during class. Immediately afterward, Shizune bugs her to translate something to Hisao despite being able to write perfectly damn well. My genius idea is: during her path, Hisao will probably end up learning sign language from Shizune using her ability to write! I saw that sign language would probably be necessary as A) there is no Misha path and B) it wouldn't really work to have Misha translating as topics got deeper and more personal.
As I start my second playthrough, I'm so excited for the potential I see in romancing Shizune via Hisao. At this point I've looked up enough information about the mechanics of my choices to ensure I get the path I'm after. I'm even rewarded with a scene at The Shanghai where Hisao wonders about the meaning of a particular sign Shizune makes! It causes many a very manly giggle and squee to spew out of my mouth. Unfortunately, Hisao doesn't really pick up interest in signing until Act 2.
This is where it all goes to shit for me. Right off the bat, Shizune and Hisao are forced to communicate without Misha. They even use a pad of paper and pens to talk to each other! I also note that this is the first time we actually see exactly what Shizune is saying, as opposed to a translation. You can tell that Shizune's voice is different from the version of her we've heard through Misha.
Logically, Hisao sees reason to start learning sign language. However, apparently "The only person [he] can think to ask, at the moment, is Misha?" Use your brain Hisao. There is a gorgeous girl right in front of you who both knows sign language and loves challenges. Nope, he goes and asks Misha about sign language classes provided by the school. Afterwards, he asks Misha not to tell Shizune that he's learning sign language. /facepalm
Why the secrecy? Shizune is competitive, but that doesn't mean she expects you to know sign language perfectly or even terribly proficiently right from the get-go! And saving it up as a nice surprise? BULLSHIT. You may as well start using it every chance you get, which in turn would help Hisao learn more quickly. Speaking of, apparently Hisao has a gift for learning sign language remarkable quickly. Every time they mention this fact in the narrative, it just sounds forced. With all due respect to the author, I just get this feeling of "Welp, I'm writing a story in which my main character is interested in a deaf girl, but he doesn't know sign language. Better get that out of the way quickly!" The argument could be made that Hisao is exposed to a lot of sign language due to hanging out with Misha and Shizune all the time, but I don't see that affecting his rate of learning extensively. He isn't focused on their hands, trying instead to be polite by looking at the face of whomever he is speaking to.*
I will note that I found it quite rewarding to see Hisao slowly pick up snippets of what Shizune is saying as he learns.
Then, after Hisao did all his learning on his own, building up his ability in secret for (weeks/months?), training for a grand reveal in order to make Shizune swoon or be impressed or what have you, Misha just up and tells Shizune anyway?? What the fuck. What purpose does that serve in the narrative?
My last gripe (before moving on to another path) was just how Hisao's vocabulary seems random at times, missing a word here and there for the arbitrary reason of showing that he is not yet fluent. However, the reader doesn't have any grasp of what words would be more difficult to remember or less common in usage because Hisao (seemingly) wakes up one day knowing sign language almost fluently.
TL;DR: I got part way through Shizune Act 2, but was unhappy with how things went regarding Hisao learning sign language. Huge characterization opportunity missed for both Hisao and Shizune. (Also please remember those spoiler tags if it's beyond act 2 or in another path ^_^)
EDIT: for clarity in a few places
EDIT2: *As Kutagh pointed out, sign language (or at least ASL) happens primarily above waist-height, at or near the face, so that point is partially invalidated.
OK. So I had this great idea in act 1 about Shizune and Hisao eventually learning to communicate through sign language. I thought about it during my first playthrough when Misha once mentioned how exhausted she was during class. Immediately afterward, Shizune bugs her to translate something to Hisao despite being able to write perfectly damn well. My genius idea is: during her path, Hisao will probably end up learning sign language from Shizune using her ability to write! I saw that sign language would probably be necessary as A) there is no Misha path and B) it wouldn't really work to have Misha translating as topics got deeper and more personal.
As I start my second playthrough, I'm so excited for the potential I see in romancing Shizune via Hisao. At this point I've looked up enough information about the mechanics of my choices to ensure I get the path I'm after. I'm even rewarded with a scene at The Shanghai where Hisao wonders about the meaning of a particular sign Shizune makes! It causes many a very manly giggle and squee to spew out of my mouth. Unfortunately, Hisao doesn't really pick up interest in signing until Act 2.
This is where it all goes to shit for me. Right off the bat, Shizune and Hisao are forced to communicate without Misha. They even use a pad of paper and pens to talk to each other! I also note that this is the first time we actually see exactly what Shizune is saying, as opposed to a translation. You can tell that Shizune's voice is different from the version of her we've heard through Misha.
Logically, Hisao sees reason to start learning sign language. However, apparently "The only person [he] can think to ask, at the moment, is Misha?" Use your brain Hisao. There is a gorgeous girl right in front of you who both knows sign language and loves challenges. Nope, he goes and asks Misha about sign language classes provided by the school. Afterwards, he asks Misha not to tell Shizune that he's learning sign language. /facepalm
Why the secrecy? Shizune is competitive, but that doesn't mean she expects you to know sign language perfectly or even terribly proficiently right from the get-go! And saving it up as a nice surprise? BULLSHIT. You may as well start using it every chance you get, which in turn would help Hisao learn more quickly. Speaking of, apparently Hisao has a gift for learning sign language remarkable quickly. Every time they mention this fact in the narrative, it just sounds forced. With all due respect to the author, I just get this feeling of "Welp, I'm writing a story in which my main character is interested in a deaf girl, but he doesn't know sign language. Better get that out of the way quickly!" The argument could be made that Hisao is exposed to a lot of sign language due to hanging out with Misha and Shizune all the time, but I don't see that affecting his rate of learning extensively. He isn't focused on their hands, trying instead to be polite by looking at the face of whomever he is speaking to.*
I will note that I found it quite rewarding to see Hisao slowly pick up snippets of what Shizune is saying as he learns.
Then, after Hisao did all his learning on his own, building up his ability in secret for (weeks/months?), training for a grand reveal in order to make Shizune swoon or be impressed or what have you, Misha just up and tells Shizune anyway?? What the fuck. What purpose does that serve in the narrative?
My last gripe (before moving on to another path) was just how Hisao's vocabulary seems random at times, missing a word here and there for the arbitrary reason of showing that he is not yet fluent. However, the reader doesn't have any grasp of what words would be more difficult to remember or less common in usage because Hisao (seemingly) wakes up one day knowing sign language almost fluently.
TL;DR: I got part way through Shizune Act 2, but was unhappy with how things went regarding Hisao learning sign language. Huge characterization opportunity missed for both Hisao and Shizune. (Also please remember those spoiler tags if it's beyond act 2 or in another path ^_^)
EDIT: for clarity in a few places
EDIT2: *As Kutagh pointed out, sign language (or at least ASL) happens primarily above waist-height, at or near the face, so that point is partially invalidated.