Hanako Bakes a Cake (Short One-Shot)

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Re: Hanako Bakes a Cake (Short One-Shot)

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ThistlewickVII wrote:Freaked me right out.
Excellent concept, and the story itself isn't as bad as the other reviewers say.
Yeah, it would have been cooler if
a) She'd fed it to Hisao
or b) It WAS Hisao
How did she carry the plate without her fingers?
How did Misha eat some cakes without tasting the Bacon?
How did no-one notice?

it wasn't her fingers

and her flesh has more of a beef jerky taste than bacon
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Well I can only assume that the finger was possibly Hisao's since he isn't in the story, only mentioned. You know to give the cupcakes alotta heart!
As for her thigh pie I'm guessing it would be her right, not like it matters, but it would have a stronger and crisper flavor.
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Actually after reading it again,
It actually was pretty good
I mean don't like the idea of it but the story and writing itself was pretty good
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Hadokant wrote:Actually after reading it again,
It actually was pretty good
I mean don't like the idea of it but the story and writing itself was pretty good


Actually, everything about was intentionally cheesy and terrible
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Yeah it does =.=
But i really did mean those comments
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