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Re: Reconnect (Post-Hanako Bad End)

Posted: Fri Apr 06, 2012 2:46 pm
by Daitengu
Felt like I was reading an ad lib, summarized, retelling of the good ending from the VN.

Re: Reconnect (Post-Hanako Bad End)

Posted: Fri Apr 06, 2012 3:07 pm
by Brogurt
I'm certain there's some way for you to get the same point across without reusing the exact same lines form the good end. There was some good stuff like the broken and battered soul bit, but seeing so many of the exact same lines from the game made me just kind of skip through it.

Also, this sentence was awesome, if a bit lengthy, and there should be more like it, but there wasn't.
He contorts his face into a snarl and is about to begin what I assume to be a diatribe about me letting down every living thing on the planet with a Y chromosome, but I take preemptive actions.
And yes, tenses. Too many for me to point out every instance. Gewd lawd.

Re: Reconnect (Post-Hanako Bad End)

Posted: Fri Apr 06, 2012 4:27 pm
by txalolrn9
yeah I can see how just rehashing the convo from the other ending is lame

I'll try to change it

Re: Reconnect (Post-Hanako Bad End)

Posted: Fri Apr 06, 2012 4:51 pm
by BobBobberson
Wait...so Hisao's with Hanako, but he's going to f**k Misha? What alternate KS route is this and how can I get it in my game?

Re: Reconnect (Post-Hanako Bad End)

Posted: Fri Apr 06, 2012 7:58 pm
by Roamin12
THE TENSES! MY GOD THE TENSES! But whatever, I liked the story until the ending, it felt like a rehashed good ending. The rest of the story however, was pretty good, I really liked the message in the book, a clever idea that was...

Re: Reconnect (Post-Hanako Bad End)

Posted: Fri Apr 06, 2012 10:11 pm
by tony246
Ah tenses, the enemy of all mankind. The destroyer of all good thoughts and countless worlds and the master of a million wise. How I hate thee.

But anyway, yeah, good stuff so far man. Of course, I basically call anything not overly heartdestroying good so take that as you will.

Re: Reconnect (Post-Hanako Bad End)

Posted: Sat Apr 07, 2012 8:47 pm
by Robnonymous
I've there's no Bender in the epilogue I will lose all respect for you and punch you.