Page 3 of 7

Re: Ascent: An Emilogue (Erotic Content)

Posted: Mon Mar 12, 2012 11:22 pm
by Rikabro
I've heard such good things about this and have been meaning to read it for a while.

You should have heard me while reading this. I sounded like a studio audience of a 90s sitcom. A real emotional rollercoaster. Everything you might want from a story like this. It greatly exceeded my expectations, which is saying a lot because this story has gotten a lot of hype in /vg/.

The sex scenes were great. I love how they weren't just bland fuck-fests but included a lot of personality and character. The banter between them, especially in the first one, was superb.

The final scene with Meiko was hilarious.

Well, I'm not going to bother listing everything I loved about this story, because that would take a long time. Suffice it to say this is one of the finest pieces of KS fiction I've read and I'm glad I took the time to finally read it.

Secretly a little disappointed it didn't end in sex with Meiko, but I can only ask so much.

Re: Ascent: An Emilogue (Erotic Content)

Posted: Tue Mar 13, 2012 2:17 am
by Mountaineer
Rikabro wrote:I've heard such good things about this and have been meaning to read it for a while.

You should have heard me while reading this. I sounded like a studio audience of a 90s sitcom. A real emotional rollercoaster. Everything you might want from a story like this. It greatly exceeded my expectations, which is saying a lot because this story has gotten a lot of hype in /vg/.

The sex scenes were great. I love how they weren't just bland fuck-fests but included a lot of personality and character. The banter between them, especially in the first one, was superb.

The final scene with Meiko was hilarious.

Well, I'm not going to bother listing everything I loved about this story, because that would take a long time. Suffice it to say this is one of the finest pieces of KS fiction I've read and I'm glad I took the time to finally read it.

Secretly a little disappointed it didn't end in sex with Meiko, but I can only ask so much.
Thanks for the comprehensive feedback, rikabro. I've heard some mixed reviews regarding the sex scenes, some pointing out that they were forced, so I'm glad to see that it is at least open to intrepretation on that front.

Glad you enjoyed it!

if i wasn't an emibro i would have seriously considered it.
Homeless wrote:The hell man? So many feels... *turns head and wipes a manly tear from my eye*

Very good
Oh boy, I didn't intend for anyone to cry! Sorry! :)
CosmicCricket wrote:Loved this, it is right up there with Going the Distance and Fractal Butterfly.

One problem: Hisao is way smarter in this fiction than he is in the game. Though I suppose it's not that much of a problem. :wink:
Thanks for reading! Would you mind linking those two fics for me? I'm interested to see where this puts my first work :O

Re: Ascent: An Emilogue (Erotic Content)

Posted: Tue Mar 13, 2012 2:29 am
by Zombiedude101
Mountaineer, great fanfic, one of the best I've read in a while. Any chance you'll do a sequel to this?

Re: Ascent: An Emilogue (Erotic Content)

Posted: Tue Mar 13, 2012 2:57 am
by Mountaineer
Zombiedude101 wrote:Mountaineer, great fanfic, one of the best I've read in a while. Any chance you'll do a sequel to this?
Definitely a possibility and something that I would like to do. Unfortunately I am still working on my Hanako work and a small VN project so it would be some time before it is completed.

I'm glad you liked it!

Re: Ascent: An Emilogue (Erotic Content)

Posted: Tue Mar 13, 2012 3:06 am
by Mirage_GSM

Re: Ascent: An Emilogue (Erotic Content)

Posted: Tue Mar 13, 2012 8:43 am
by BlackWaltzTheThird
I would die for you... That's what sums up this story for me. Such a powerful statement. I greatly admire what you've written here, although I'm not a fan of having speech and prose in the same paragraph. If you take a look at my writing you'll notice I avoid this as much as possible, for that reason. In spite of that, excellent work, would read again.

Re: Ascent: An Emilogue (Erotic Content)

Posted: Wed Mar 14, 2012 10:58 pm
by Dan50
XD the ending was GREAT haha. Poor Emi she was so scared. I would love a sequel. Seeing them move in together would be great

Re: Ascent: An Emilogue (Erotic Content)

Posted: Thu Mar 15, 2012 12:46 am
by Lothbrok
You're doing VN work? Care to share because I'd love to follow your work.

Re: Ascent: An Emilogue (Erotic Content)

Posted: Sat Mar 17, 2012 1:18 am
by Mountaineer
Lothbrok wrote:You're doing VN work? Care to share because I'd love to follow your work.
The people from the CAPSLOCK CHALLENGE and Ms. Crispy Book Burning steam groups (KS fangroups) have teamed up and are working on a project together that I may or may not be a part of.

Stay tuned...

Re: Ascent: An Emilogue (Erotic Content)

Posted: Mon Mar 26, 2012 10:32 pm
by griffon8
Trying to catch up on all this fanfic…

I will say I enjoyed this story. Minor bits of editing needed, but that's expected.

What I don't understand is why Hisao had to carry Emi in his arms. Emi should have put Hisao's pack on her back and then Hisao could have carried her on his back. Then his arms would have been supporting Emi's legs, while Emi's arms wrapped around Hisao's neck. Much easier to move that way.

Re: Ascent: An Emilogue (Erotic Content)

Posted: Wed Mar 28, 2012 12:03 am
by Mountaineer
griffon8 wrote:Trying to catch up on all this fanfic…

I will say I enjoyed this story. Minor bits of editing needed, but that's expected.

What I don't understand is why Hisao had to carry Emi in his arms. Emi should have put Hisao's pack on her back and then Hisao could have carried her on his back. Then his arms would have been supporting Emi's legs, while Emi's arms wrapped around Hisao's neck. Much easier to move that way.
Thanks for reading! Glad ya enjoyed it!

Yeah, this was pointed out to me while I was drafting the fic. It was a pretty bad oversight, but I had my reasons:

Because of MASTER OF ROMANCE

EDIT: Oh also because he still had his backpack. After he ditches it though, yeah it would have made more sense that way

Re: Ascent: An Emilogue (Erotic Content)

Posted: Wed Mar 28, 2012 12:30 am
by BeastlyFerret
Well Done Sir.... Well done! Just Beautiful.........


Re: Ascent: An Emilogue (Erotic Content)

Posted: Wed Mar 28, 2012 4:33 am
by zanger
I expected Hisao to die at the end =/

Re: Ascent: An Emilogue (Erotic Content)

Posted: Mon Apr 02, 2012 9:38 am
by Mountaineer
zanger wrote:I expected Hisao to die at the end =/
It was in the initial plan...

I couldn't do it.

also i can continue the story if need be now

Re: Ascent: An Emilogue (Erotic Content)

Posted: Mon Apr 02, 2012 10:47 am
by Dan50
Looking forward to the sequel :D