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My First Attempt

Posted: Fri Feb 03, 2012 10:32 pm
by M4RTYER
I just wrote a small piece here that I couldn't get out of my head. I would of course love any feedback you can offer, Hope you enjoy.

“Hisao, can you come here? I think I'm slipping away now and I want to be with you in the end. There is so much we never got to do you and I. I have no regrets, but I do wish we had more time. It’s ironic isn’t it? The doctors said your condition would take you any day now but you kept fighting, fighting for me. Please Hisao, when I go don’t stop. I want you to stay strong for both of us. I love you very much, don’t ever forget that. Your shaking, please don’t cry. Just stay with me, just a little longer.”

After a few minutes Doctor Wasurai took his hand from hers and whispered to the nurse. “Lilly Satuo, Time of death 11:26pm. I-I couldn’t tell her. I just didn’t have it in me.” The nurse looked confused, he sighed deeply before elaborating. “Hisao, her husband. He was admitted 3 hours ago for complications with his heart… he died, massive pulmonary failure. I just- I couldn’t tell her. I couldn't...”

Re: My First Attempt

Posted: Sat Feb 04, 2012 4:29 pm
by scott1and
.... :(

Re: My First Attempt

Posted: Sat Feb 04, 2012 4:50 pm
by Guest
Ignorance is bliss. The one time one should be thankful that Lilly is blind.
Though I would have thought there be more people by Lilly's side, but then again it is midnight.
Just out of curiosity, what was Lilly's cause of death?