Katawa Shoujo Forums

This is truly a great undertaking.
Shakespeare himself would be impressed, I think.
I enjoyed it, there is no mistaking.
But in your armour, this may be a chink.

Mirage_GSM wrote:"Calm down!" My dad tries for a soothing voice.

In my view, this line, it is not quite right.

Mirage_GSM wrote:"Calm down!" Father says, with a soothing voice.

Perhaps, might be a better option. Might.

Thanks, but no.
In iambic pentameter every second syllable is stressed, so that would read:

Calm down!" Father says, with a soothing voice.

Would sound strange, wouldn't it with "father" stressed on the second syllable?

Oh dammit you're right. I was reading it with the stresses starting on the first syllable of each line. My bad.

Perhaps '"Calm down!" My father says with soothing voice'?