First of all, as always, thanks to all for the kind (and not-necessarily-kind) words! I honestly had no idea what the reception to this chapter would be, but it was one of those things that, I felt, could only be done the way it was.
brythain wrote:Now that was one hell of a tour-de-force. It's not normally possible to write that much Rin at one stretch. Are you sure you're still alive?
Yes. At least I think so. We could all be not-alive right now, or...
Must get out of Rin-space...
*applause*
Okay, that might be a bit much
.
Also many many Rin-jokes. Or knot.
Except that to Rin, many, if not most, if not all, of them are quite serious. Maybe.
bhtooefr wrote:I think my head just asploded. Pure undiluted Rin is... wow. I think I need to drink some more.
Oh, dear. That's a sign of alcoholism, I hear.
Oscar Wildecat wrote:This chapter was pure unadulterated awesome!!!
Just leaving this here for posterity.
brythain wrote:Oscar Wildecat wrote:It was an interesting new perspective, and I collected a few new people that week, but I still never got a good look at the Boy Who Lives Across From Hisao's pants.
I read it as 'The Boy Who Lives Across From
Hisao's Pants' at first, which cracked me up. It cracked me up when I figured it out and then recracked me when I decided it didn't matter.
And thank you for cracking me up in return!
nemz wrote:Well, this was a pleasant surprise. A bit hard to follow (especially the first few paragraphs), but after a little while it just clicks and it reads smooth as anything, like reading Shakespear and having to make an effort to stop thinking like that after you finish.
You know, I don't care how loose it is, you never forget the first time your work is compared to Shakespeare's
.
bhtooefr wrote:dewelar wrote:That would explain why I remember something about a cat running away from my arms that I don't have, and something about the girl Emi always beats at the track meets.
...the post-Lilly bad end fanfics are colliding.
Coincidence that it happened to be brythain that commented on Rin's scroll?
I think it's time to break out the Woodford Reserve now that I've read this chapter three times.
See? I warned you, but you didn't listen. Oh, wait...
That
is kind of the
ur-reference, so yes.
forgetmenot wrote:Anyhow, what I'm trying to say is that in terms of pacing, content, and literary merit, this is your best chapter yet. Kudos.
Many thanks.
Blasphemy wrote:I can't say I'm liking the somewhat forth wall breaking narration in this story, one that usually has me very immersed. Even if this kind of narration may fit Rin's mannerisms a bit better I'm still not too keen on it. Maybe I'll come around to it but first impression was rather dislike.
*nods* I knew going in that this might not work (see above), and even if it did work it probably wouldn't work for everyone. In the end, though, I needed a Rin chapter here, and I'd already established the Rin PoV as being a more direct first-person narrative in the Tanabata interlude -- with, yes, the lack of a fourth wall. I know it's a severe stylistic break, but that was intentional. Rin's just...Rin. Frankly, attempting a Rin PoV using her actual internal monologue would be nigh impossible. It would be on the level of trying to condense
Ulysses into a size appropriate for a forum post.
Anyway, I'm fine with anyone disliking this chapter. I probably would have been disappointed if at least
some people didn't. As Rin herself would say...*shrug*.