You could've also just turned Word Wrap on in Notepad.TyronePotato wrote:
Also it's a bit tedious reading this in notepad, what with the constant scrolling to the right and stuff. Any other ways of reading that make it easier?
EDIT: I have found the wonders of a program called Microsoft Word.. strange device, it is..
Summer's Clover (Miki Path)
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"I wonder what is it about the rain?"
"Everything."
"Everything."
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I..Valjean Lafitte wrote:You could've also just turned Word Wrap on in Notepad.TyronePotato wrote:
Also it's a bit tedious reading this in notepad, what with the constant scrolling to the right and stuff. Any other ways of reading that make it easier?
EDIT: I have found the wonders of a program called Microsoft Word.. strange device, it is..
Damn it, proven stupid yet again.
ooooh feels.
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Haha, it's no big deal. I've done plenty of dumber things.TyronePotato wrote:I..Valjean Lafitte wrote:You could've also just turned Word Wrap on in Notepad.TyronePotato wrote:
Also it's a bit tedious reading this in notepad, what with the constant scrolling to the right and stuff. Any other ways of reading that make it easier?
EDIT: I have found the wonders of a program called Microsoft Word.. strange device, it is..
Damn it, proven stupid yet again.
"I wonder what is it about the rain?"
"Everything."
"Everything."
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HOLY FUCK SURIKO I KNEW YOU WOULDN'T LET ME DOWN
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I am finally catching up and reading through this. Not nearly finished yet, but "Since I had to format my computer after letting you use it for five bloody minutes?" - I couldn't help laughing at this, because I've known people exactly like that where I used to work
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So it took me a long time to finish all of it, and I can think of only one thing to say...
You broke the curse.
You broke the curse.
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Apart from the misspellings it was a good read. Could have used some more proofreading but it was nice overall.
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Since this is in the fanfic section I didn't think much of it initially, but this is surprisingly good even with the typo's, in fact I loved it, which isn't all that surprising to me i guess coz Suriko is my favorite writer among the 4LS staff for writing Lilly's route. Miki is now my 2nd favorite, which fluctuates to 3rd sometimes when i think about Hanako.
<perv mode on>
Too bad this won't be added to the game. I bet she'd have the best h-scenes (or a really close 2nd to Lilly)
I would've loved to see that noon run a......
</perv mode off before i creep my self out>
Only saw this now, but thank you very much for the late Christmas gift
And a belated merry Christmas and happy new year to you Suriko! I hope to read more of your amazing work in the future.
<perv mode on>
Too bad this won't be added to the game. I bet she'd have the best h-scenes (or a really close 2nd to Lilly)
I would've loved to see that noon run a......
</perv mode off before i creep my self out>
Only saw this now, but thank you very much for the late Christmas gift
And a belated merry Christmas and happy new year to you Suriko! I hope to read more of your amazing work in the future.
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That was pretty cool. The endings felt a little forced in both cases but it was a fun journey getting there.
Rin > Shizune > Emi > Hanako > Lilly
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THIS ENTIRE POST IS A MASSIVE SPOILER!!!!
Whew, finally managed to finish this. The obvious typos notwithstanding, I was mostly satisfied with this reading experience. It was refreshing, because it shed quite a lot of much welcomed light into the lives and personalities of two of the most popular sideshow characters.
Here's a question, however, that I'd like to point directly to Suriko: What exactly was Suzu hoping to achieve by coming out to her family so bluntly about her gayness? Her timing and delivery of the confession were just completely off, all she managed to do was to almost ruin the whole vacation for the whole group.
Also, what exactly were the main motivators that drove Suzu into attempting suicide? Was she tired of her illness and her body not functioning properly? Was Suzu envious of Miki's outgoing personality and ability to make friends and hold a social life, while she was almost a full blown hikki, destined to a life of loneliness post-Yamaku (which is the impression that I got)? Or was she crushed that badly by the knowledge that she'd have to forever live with the weight of her parents' judgmental attitude and lack of acceptance towards her homosexuality?
Some of the moments that I enjoyed were the The House of the Dead-session between Miki and Hisao at the town arcade, Miki's blowjob to Hisao (almost as epic in it's awkwardness as the now infamous shed-scene was during Emi's path), and the lonely moment that Miki spent in her thoughts, just by herself in her old classroom in the old, empty school building. These were some of the moments that, I feel, represented some of the finer writing in this story. That blowjob scene totally made me lose my sides.
I must, however, criticize both of the endings, as they feel much too abrupt, like a car crash into a brick wall, and especially so in Suzu's path. I think the biggest lost opportunity there was that Suzu's parents weren't explored enough. Whether they like it or not, whether they care or not, they ended up owing their daughter's life to Miki. Without her quick actions, Suzu would've most likely succeeded in her suicide attempt. So, I felt that an additional scene during the ending, featuring some sort of truce agreement between Miki and Suzu's parents would've been cool. That could've been used as a device to further allow Miki and Suzu breathe easier in their relationship, knowing that even if Suzu's parents don't quite agree with it, they at least are now more tolerant of Miki, having received proof that Miki's presence in Suzu's life doesn't have to be a negative thing.
In the Hisao-branch, Hisao, out of nowhere suddenly goes on full douchebag mode previously familiar from the Rin-path, and starts chastising Miki for her bad performance in school, just a scant few months away from graduation when it's too late to do anything about it. Just a few hours later they kiss and make up, while riding together into the sunset. I think it was all just much too fast.
Other than that, good show here.
Whew, finally managed to finish this. The obvious typos notwithstanding, I was mostly satisfied with this reading experience. It was refreshing, because it shed quite a lot of much welcomed light into the lives and personalities of two of the most popular sideshow characters.
Here's a question, however, that I'd like to point directly to Suriko: What exactly was Suzu hoping to achieve by coming out to her family so bluntly about her gayness? Her timing and delivery of the confession were just completely off, all she managed to do was to almost ruin the whole vacation for the whole group.
Also, what exactly were the main motivators that drove Suzu into attempting suicide? Was she tired of her illness and her body not functioning properly? Was Suzu envious of Miki's outgoing personality and ability to make friends and hold a social life, while she was almost a full blown hikki, destined to a life of loneliness post-Yamaku (which is the impression that I got)? Or was she crushed that badly by the knowledge that she'd have to forever live with the weight of her parents' judgmental attitude and lack of acceptance towards her homosexuality?
Some of the moments that I enjoyed were the The House of the Dead-session between Miki and Hisao at the town arcade, Miki's blowjob to Hisao (almost as epic in it's awkwardness as the now infamous shed-scene was during Emi's path), and the lonely moment that Miki spent in her thoughts, just by herself in her old classroom in the old, empty school building. These were some of the moments that, I feel, represented some of the finer writing in this story. That blowjob scene totally made me lose my sides.
I must, however, criticize both of the endings, as they feel much too abrupt, like a car crash into a brick wall, and especially so in Suzu's path. I think the biggest lost opportunity there was that Suzu's parents weren't explored enough. Whether they like it or not, whether they care or not, they ended up owing their daughter's life to Miki. Without her quick actions, Suzu would've most likely succeeded in her suicide attempt. So, I felt that an additional scene during the ending, featuring some sort of truce agreement between Miki and Suzu's parents would've been cool. That could've been used as a device to further allow Miki and Suzu breathe easier in their relationship, knowing that even if Suzu's parents don't quite agree with it, they at least are now more tolerant of Miki, having received proof that Miki's presence in Suzu's life doesn't have to be a negative thing.
In the Hisao-branch, Hisao, out of nowhere suddenly goes on full douchebag mode previously familiar from the Rin-path, and starts chastising Miki for her bad performance in school, just a scant few months away from graduation when it's too late to do anything about it. Just a few hours later they kiss and make up, while riding together into the sunset. I think it was all just much too fast.
Other than that, good show here.
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I guess in the Japanese context, there never is a "good time" to come out of the closet. Might as well do it as bombastically as possible.
Also, Suzu is a minority within a minority. It would be darn difficult for her to find company which wouldn't mind her disability or her homosexuality.
Also, Suzu is a minority within a minority. It would be darn difficult for her to find company which wouldn't mind her disability or her homosexuality.
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"...since love and fear can hardly exist together, if we must choose between them, it is far safer to be feared than loved. However, it is important above all to avoid being hated."
"...since love and fear can hardly exist together, if we must choose between them, it is far safer to be feared than loved. However, it is important above all to avoid being hated."
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Not too sure about that.YZQ wrote:I guess in the Japanese context, there never is a "good time" to come out of the closet. Might as well do it as bombastically as possible.
Also, Suzu is a minority within a minority. It would be darn difficult for her to find company which wouldn't mind her disability or her homosexuality.
Anyone know how to summon Megumeru to give us an explanation?
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I think it's more a social context thing — people (mostly in the entertainment industry) come out all the time, but it's not seen as the conventional thing for everyone else. This means that for 'normal' people who are in standard occupations, it's often concealed or at least not mentioned. Same with disabilities — they are not-normal and hence make people uncomfortable. But if you are an unconventional personality, or in an area of life that thrives on that, it isn't so bad, might even be a selling point.Steinherz wrote:Not too sure about that.YZQ wrote:I guess in the Japanese context, there never is a "good time" to come out of the closet. Might as well do it as bombastically as possible.
Also, Suzu is a minority within a minority. It would be darn difficult for her to find company which wouldn't mind her disability or her homosexuality.
Anyone know how to summon Megumeru to give us an explanation?
Post-Yamaku, what happens? After The Dream is a mosaic that follows everyone to the (sometimes) bitter end.
Main Index (Complete)—Shizune/Lilly/Emi/Hanako/Rin/Misha + Miki + Natsume
Secondary Arcs: Rika/Mutou/Akira • Hideaki | Others (WIP): Straw—A Dream of Suzu • Sakura—The Kenji Saga.
"Much has been lost, and there is much left to lose." — Tim Powers, The Drawing of the Dark (1979)
Main Index (Complete)—Shizune/Lilly/Emi/Hanako/Rin/Misha + Miki + Natsume
Secondary Arcs: Rika/Mutou/Akira • Hideaki | Others (WIP): Straw—A Dream of Suzu • Sakura—The Kenji Saga.
"Much has been lost, and there is much left to lose." — Tim Powers, The Drawing of the Dark (1979)
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I've gotten a minor explanation from Megumeru (because he is Japanese and would know better than us. Some minor edits to make it less cluttered):brythain wrote:I think it's more a social context thing — people (mostly in the entertainment industry) come out all the time, but it's not seen as the conventional thing for everyone else. This means that for 'normal' people who are in standard occupations, it's often concealed or at least not mentioned. Same with disabilities — they are not-normal and hence make people uncomfortable. But if you are an unconventional personality, or in an area of life that thrives on that, it isn't so bad, might even be a selling point.Steinherz wrote:Not too sure about that.YZQ wrote:I guess in the Japanese context, there never is a "good time" to come out of the closet. Might as well do it as bombastically as possible.
Also, Suzu is a minority within a minority. It would be darn difficult for her to find company which wouldn't mind her disability or her homosexuality.
Anyone know how to summon Megumeru to give us an explanation?
Megumeru wrote:Aah...thatSteinherz wrote:"coming out of the closet" means "coming out as bi/homosexual"Megumeru wrote:Coming out of a closet...?
Coming of age ceremony? Or stop being a hikikomori?
Well...huh. That's usually something best kept private--people here don't really agree about that, so I think most people reveal themselves to only people they have interest in? I don't know anyone who are homosexual personally.
Parents response are usually negative, community more or less the same. So if only two people who share the same preference kept it to themselves, no one will have a problem about it
So apparently homosexuality in Japan is just like most personal matters: Best kept privateMegumeru wrote:I heard that response may be excommunication or disowning and it is as ready as it is (depending on the family) I think? It's like bringing shame to the family name, so most people keep it quiet or just reveal to select few.
I write take a look, would you kindly?
I also draw, kind of.
I also draw, kind of.
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Oddball wrote:It's an obvious mistake. Both are disfigured orphans that read alot and both wear green skirts.
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Well, if it is a "fan fic" can we translate this in a other language? ^^
This path is..... really.... awesome *o*
This path is..... really.... awesome *o*
Lilly = Akira > Miki = Hanako > Emi > Rin > Shizune
Stuff I'm currently writing : Beyond the haze : A Lilly Satou pseudo-route, Lullaby of an open heart : A Saki pseudo-route & Sakura Blossom : A way with Hisao
Stuff I'm currently writing : Beyond the haze : A Lilly Satou pseudo-route, Lullaby of an open heart : A Saki pseudo-route & Sakura Blossom : A way with Hisao