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YES, A double long dose! Seriously, this just made my week and with the turn of events of the last chapter I can't wait for the next addition.

This line "mobile drilling platform" I just lost it.

Two more wonderful chapters, thank you

The plot seem to have quicken, not that I'm complaining

I enjoy the introspective ones just as equally

Ah, this is such a fun read. You give all the little background folk such a spark of life, making even the jerky ones a little endearing in their disgruntled jerkitude.

Haha, gaylord.

I love the way you are writing this. It's not often that I actually like a story from a girls perspective.

Thanks for more

It seems we'll get to know that unknown person mentioned in the very first part of this Suzu story in her dreams. Which is partly why I'm glad you continued writing after your opening post.

That double-dose is just what I needed to raise my spirits! Thank you for yet another excellent installment.

Very enjoyable. Suzu seems to be getting a lot of attention in these here forums of late.

Two things that stood out though. Emi & Rin are in 3–4, not 3–1. And I'd be surprised if there were enough runners on Yamaku's track team to field two teams for the relay. It would be much more likely that Emi and Miki would be on the same relay, probably with Miki first, as we know Emi was anchor. Of course, that would mean that Miki would be getting a first place ribbon, so that's easy enough to ignore.

As always though, it's your fic. You can do whatever you want with it.

Titus wrote:I really like Suzu and Hisao's relationship, and I love the dialogue that goes on between them. Suzu's thoughts are fun to read, she's quite a thinker when she's awake. That Grim Reaper guy too, I'd love to see whatever happens to him. You can't kill death...

Nope, you just beat him at Twister and he becomes your servant.

I'm digging this one, too. All the best fics here have Miki being deliciously Miki, and I gotta agree with the consensus that seeing the same old story through the eyes of the female is pretty killer. Keep it up.

Elcor wrote:Seriously, this just made my week and with the turn of events of the last chapter I can't wait for the next addition.

Wha... seriously? Gosh, wow. Well. Thanks, I'm really glad you enjoyed it, and thank you to everyone else as well. I am extremely lucky to have people who like to read the things I put out, and I'm grateful.

griffon8 wrote:Very enjoyable. Suzu seems to be getting a lot of attention in these here forums of late.

Two things that stood out though. Emi & Rin are in 3–4, not 3–1. And I'd be surprised if there were enough runners on Yamaku's track team to field two teams for the relay. It would be much more likely that Emi and Miki would be on the same relay, probably with Miki first, as we know Emi was anchor. Of course, that would mean that Miki would be getting a first place ribbon, so that's easy enough to ignore.

As always though, it's your fic. You can do whatever you want with it.

Thanks for pointing that out. It's been a while since I've played Emi or Rin's route and frankly I'd forgotten that 3-4 existed, since Hisao and the bunch are in 3-3 and Lilly is in 3-2, I just assumed they were in 3-1. As for the relay race, well... I don't really know how track works and now everybody can see that, haha. I appreciate you pointing those out, it's important for me to know my mistakes just as much, if not more than my successes. And thanks for reading,

I'm really enjoying this, and it's quite interesting in that you've done it from Suzu's point of view rather than Hisao's.

I love you Lunch, never stop writing~

If he does then a certain someone's going to wake up with a horse's head on their pillow.

I am sure Lenin would approve this magnificent story!
Am I the only one who thinks suzu needs to be more friendly to death?

Just decided to drop by to show my appreciation for all the work you do. This fan-fic and few select others are the sole reason I still find my way in here sometimes. Cheers!