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Re: Zombies - Updated 02/09/13
Posted: Mon Sep 02, 2013 4:14 pm
by Comrade
TheCatBeyondSpace! wrote:Comrade wrote:That aside, how good/bad/horrible this chapter was?
I'm not very good with critiques (Just ask lorsquirrel for confirmation.), So I'll just say that it was enjoyable with a couple of spelling errors.
Yeah, I've noticed some myself when i was reading it
Re: Zombies - Updated 02/09/13
Posted: Mon Sep 02, 2013 4:27 pm
by Oscar Wildecat
I ran you story through a text editing program I use for work, and came up with the following:
10 * I recoil back from his outstretched hand "Whoa, take that thing away from me! I might accidently get injured or something."
* I recoil back from his outstretched hand "Whoa, take that thing away from me! I might accidentally get injured or something."
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22 * "umm, I kinda slept through the whole day, I guess it is some sort of side effects from my medication." I say, embarrassed. Did I really managed to sleep through a zombie outbreak? That is, if Kenji's correct in his assumptions.
* "Uum, I kinda slept through the whole day, I guess it is some sort of side effects from my medication." I say, embarrassed. Did I really managed to sleep through a zombie outbreak? That is, if Kenji's correct in his assumptions.
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61 * We are at the top of the stairs, Kenji leads the way with a axe in one hand and is signaling me towards him with the other.
* We are at the top of the stairs, Kenji leads the way with an axe in one hand and is signaling me towards him with the other.
62 * Kenji whispers when I'm within earshot
* Kenji whispers when I'm within earshot.
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Re: Zombies - Updated 02/09/13
Posted: Mon Sep 02, 2013 4:39 pm
by Sea
Insufficient data for meaningful response.
get the refernece, get the reference. . . .
Re: Zombies - Updated 02/09/13
Posted: Tue Sep 03, 2013 4:21 am
by Comrade
Sea wrote:Insufficient data for meaningful response.
get the refernece, get the reference. . . .
Sorry, no luck this time around.
On related news, i figured out that word wasn't the problem after all. It was just me being thick.
Re: Zombies - Updated 02/09/13
Posted: Tue Sep 03, 2013 7:01 am
by TacticalBacon
I don't know if this was supposed to be funny, but i kept laughing anyway
Re: Zombies - Updated 02/09/13
Posted: Tue Sep 03, 2013 7:07 am
by Comrade
TacticalBacon wrote:I don't know if this was supposed to be funny, but i kept laughing anyway
I'm not sure how serious i want it to be, right now I'm giving it a light hearted tone. It might take a turn into a dark ally in the future
Re: Zombies - Updated 02/09/13
Posted: Tue Sep 03, 2013 7:10 pm
by Sea
Comrade wrote:Sea wrote:Insufficient data for meaningful response.
get the refernece, get the reference. . . .
Sorry, no luck this time around.
Read
this. If I ever tried to write this is about how it'd look.
Re: Zombies - Updated 02/09/13
Posted: Wed Sep 04, 2013 2:08 am
by Comrade
Sea wrote:Comrade wrote:Sea wrote:Insufficient data for meaningful response.
get the refernece, get the reference. . . .
Sorry, no luck this time around.
Read
this. If I ever tried to write this is about how it'd look.
Too many words
Re: Zombies - Updated 02/09/13
Posted: Wed Sep 04, 2013 2:47 am
by Mirage_GSM
You should read it anyway.
It is one of the greatest stories by one of the greatest authors of all time.
Though, personally, I think Superiority is his best story...
Re: Zombies - Updated 02/09/13
Posted: Wed Sep 04, 2013 3:55 am
by BlackWaltzTheThird
Sea wrote:Read
this. If I ever tried to write this is about how it'd look.
Fascinating stuff. Perhaps I should look into more of his writing.
Re: Zombies - Updated 02/09/13
Posted: Wed Sep 04, 2013 6:56 am
by Sea
Mirage_GSM wrote:You should read it anyway.
It is one of the greatest stories by one of the greatest authors of all time.
Though, personally, I think Superiority is his best story...
It's got it's merits, but I still like that one because of it's span. Also it's really close to
Vacuum Diagrams, my favorite book. (The title is not at all indicative of the content)
Re: Zombies - Updated 02/09/13
Posted: Wed Sep 04, 2013 7:39 am
by Comrade
Are you guys Done yet?
Re: Zombies - Updated 02/09/13
Posted: Wed Sep 04, 2013 9:58 pm
by Sea
Comrade wrote:Are you guys Done yet?
Like you haven't started a random tangent before. And this is what we do while we wait for more words.
Re: Zombies - Updated 02/09/13
Posted: Sat Oct 12, 2013 3:40 am
by motokid108
TheCatBeyondSpace! wrote:Five bucks says he just killed Hanako.
If this happens, i will find you. And i will castrate you. With a rubberband and paperclip. Just like back on the farm. Nobody kills my waifu or gets her killed and lives to tell about it... And with that out of the way, I'm digging this story. Hoping for more of a comedic route, but it's your story to write as you will.
Re: Zombies - Updated 02/09/13
Posted: Sat Oct 12, 2013 4:07 am
by Comrade
motokid108 wrote:TheCatBeyondSpace! wrote:Five bucks says he just killed Hanako.
If this happens, i will find you. And i will castrate you. With a rubberband and paperclip. Just like back on the farm. Nobody kills my waifu or gets her killed and lives to tell about it... And with that out of the way, I'm digging this story. Hoping for more of a comedic route, but it's your story to write as you will.
:3