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Re: Misstep [Hanako] [EXPLICIT CONTENT] [1/5]
Posted: Sat Jan 05, 2013 2:15 pm
by Comrade
Italy is not the best place to live in right now...
Most of the Prostetution here is eastern European women exported via the desert, a lot of them die on the way
Re: Misstep [Hanako] [EXPLICIT CONTENT] [1/5]
Posted: Sat Jan 05, 2013 2:31 pm
by Mirage_GSM
Antor wrote:
And, finally, a picky detail-oriented question: How can someone look down a fully-buttoned-and-ribboned Yamaku blouse? It
The Italian "sex workers" count is estimated, by a research commissioned by the Equal opportunity Department of the Italian government in 2007, to be about 45,000. The percentage of slaves is estimated to be 10%-15% if we count the minors (7-8% if we don't, but we do) and almost the totality of them is actually foreign women.
Exactly. They are foreign women, whom nobody misses and who probably would be deported when the police finds them. None of this applies to hanako. She was abducted the next town over.
Re: Misstep [Hanako] [EXPLICIT CONTENT] [1/5]
Posted: Sat Jan 05, 2013 5:19 pm
by Doomish
ProfAllister wrote:
And, finally, a picky detail-oriented question: How can someone look down a fully-buttoned-and-ribboned Yamaku blouse? It seems to hug to the neck/sternum rather closely.
I've only just now remembered that it's pretty much impossible to look down the Yamaku uniform because of the bow, so I changed it to just have the lecher staring at her tits like a creepy goofball instead. Same basic concept except it's a lot easier to do.
I like your assessment of the story, though! Nothing specifically explicit has happened yet, which I'm glad you noted!
Re: Misstep [Hanako] [EXPLICIT CONTENT] [1/5]
Posted: Sat Jan 05, 2013 7:01 pm
by Dream
Is anyone else a bit weirded out by the way Lilly acted at the mention of the bar and the idea that Hanako might be outside town, plus some of her mannerisms with Hisao? Maybe it's just me.
In any case, excellent story, it's surprising how well it fits with the KS characters even though it's so dark. And the feeling of "anyone can die" certainly help to give a very tense tone to it.
Re: Misstep [Hanako] [EXPLICIT CONTENT] [1/5]
Posted: Sat Jan 05, 2013 9:59 pm
by nemz
Dream wrote:Is anyone else a bit weirded out by the way Lilly acted at the mention of the bar and the idea that Hanako might be outside town, plus some of her mannerisms with Hisao? Maybe it's just me.
It's not just you. Perhaps she's getting ready to leave for Scotland and is annoyed that Hisao is not turning out to be as good for Hanako as she hoped? Either that or... nah, that's crazy.
Re: Misstep [Hanako] [EXPLICIT CONTENT] [1/5]
Posted: Sun Jan 06, 2013 1:24 am
by Bi-Polar Hernandez
Goddamnit Doomish you accomplished making me uncomfortable. That's all I can really say at the moment.
You bastard.
Re: Misstep [Hanako] [EXPLICIT CONTENT] [1/5]
Posted: Sun Jan 06, 2013 1:41 am
by Doomish
nemz wrote:Either that or... nah, that's crazy.
Oho? Do you have a theory? Please, share it with the class. :3c
Re: Misstep [Hanako] [EXPLICIT CONTENT] [1/5]
Posted: Sun Jan 06, 2013 4:53 am
by nemz
Nah, I wouldn't even call it a theory. Just a gut reaction that doesn't actually make any sense at all when I really ponder it, and in all likelihood is completely off-base. And now it's been built up so much for no reason that I'm definately not sharing it.
Re: Misstep [Hanako] [EXPLICIT CONTENT] [1/5]
Posted: Sun Jan 06, 2013 3:06 pm
by Mirage_GSM
Dream wrote:And the feeling of "anyone can die" certainly help to give a very tense tone to it.
I get that feeling from every story just by reading the name "Doomish" as the author...
Re: Misstep [Hanako] [EXPLICIT CONTENT] [1/5]
Posted: Sun Jan 06, 2013 3:26 pm
by griffon8
Mirage_GSM wrote:Dream wrote:And the feeling of "anyone can die" certainly help to give a very tense tone to it.
I get that feeling from every story just by reading the name "Doomish" as the author...
QFFT!
This is why I don't read Doomish's stories until I know where it's going. So I haven't read this one.
Re: Misstep [Hanako] [EXPLICIT CONTENT] [1/5]
Posted: Sun Jan 06, 2013 3:47 pm
by Dream
griffon8 wrote:This is why I don't read Doomish's stories until I know where it's going. So I haven't read this one.
You should. It has maids.
Re: Misstep [Hanako] [EXPLICIT CONTENT] [1/5]
Posted: Sun Jan 06, 2013 4:24 pm
by Antor
Dream wrote:griffon8 wrote:This is why I don't read Doomish's stories until I know where it's going. So I haven't read this one.
You should. It has maids.
subtlety cruel... I like it.
Re: Misstep [Hanako] [EXPLICIT CONTENT] [1/5]
Posted: Sun Jan 06, 2013 10:55 pm
by YourFavAnon
This story is really, really going to end up rubbing me the wrong way, I can already feel it coming..
Re: Misstep [Hanako] [EXPLICIT CONTENT] [1/7]
Posted: Mon Jan 07, 2013 1:25 am
by Doomish
Forget it.
Re: Misstep [Hanako] [EXPLICIT CONTENT] [1/7]
Posted: Mon Jan 07, 2013 3:17 am
by FlyingRiceBowl
Another interesting development into the story, well done.