Re: Taxi ride to nowhere
Posted: Sun Nov 17, 2013 6:05 pm
This is the kind of bittersweet ending that I love. It feels very real, somehow, having that one window of opportunity where if you just did one little thing, it would have changed pretty much everything from that point forward. But instead, for one reason or another, or both, or all of them, you let the chance slip by, and the rest of your life you're wondering "what if", because it never crosses your path again.
I have just one tiny little wording nitpick, though.
(Edit: And somehow I fail to notice that this was originally posted all the way back in 2012. I feel wary of commenting on something so old, but whatever. I already hit submit, and now here it sits.)
I have just one tiny little wording nitpick, though.
The second "stop" feels unnecessary. Not only did you repeat the word in the same paragraph, which is already a bit distracting by itself, but you also said she pulled up to the place, which means it's also redundant.Oddball wrote:I pull up to the address I was given, the last stop of the day, stop, and open the door.
(Edit: And somehow I fail to notice that this was originally posted all the way back in 2012. I feel wary of commenting on something so old, but whatever. I already hit submit, and now here it sits.)