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“I didn’t, I bought a fresh one from the school store yesterday.

Waitwaitwait - They sell girls' uniforms to male students?
Creepy...

“Y’know what? I just might. Get all Gurren Lagann on your asses!” He grins.

Cutting it really close - that show was just airing at the time.

Throw some drama in there.

The problem is that so far all attempts at drama in this story didn't measure up to the non-drama parts.

Taro has a big enough chest to pass off as a girl.

Hesmiyu wrote:You make it sound like it wasn't initially planned out that way . In every fan fic I've read, Suzu seemed to always be a lazy one (not her fault though)

I'll be honest, I didn't plan it that way! It was initially going to focus on the main trio (mainly Taro) but as the story went on and I wrote some of the one-shots, the group evolved over time, incorporating more characters until we have the cast now. In Reverie, Miki lamented that no one took Suzu seriously because of her narcolepsy and that it was a shame.

jjm152 wrote:My suggestion would be: Pick some crisis and then have it resolve over the rest of the story. Maybe break up Ritsu and Taro. Maybe write some stuff from Ritsu's perspective. Work towards some sort of narrative goal. Your writing is pretty nice, so just pick a destination and go for it!

First up, thanks for commenting, JJ! Always happy to see new commentors. I've had it pointed out to me, as well as realised it myself that Taro can be a real Mary Sue and I'm going to try my best to fix that going forward and I agree that Ritsu seems a little too perfect but she's not clearly not given how she went off on Taro and Molly.

Mirage_GSM wrote:The problem is that so far all attempts at drama in this story didn't measure up to the non-drama parts.

It's true! I'm melodramatic trash

Mirage_GSM wrote:Waitwaitwait - They sell girls' uniforms to male students? Creepy...

Would it be more or less creepy if he gave exact measurements? *scratches chin in thought*

Mirage_GSM wrote:

“Y’know what? I just might. Get all Gurren Lagann on your asses!” He grins.

Cutting it really close - that show was just airing at the time.

I know, it's quite the fortuitous timing, much like Kamen Rider Den-O starting that year too and being one of the Rider shows I know the most about.

HoneyBakedHam wrote:Taro has a big enough chest to pass off as a girl.

Hasn't got the hips to pull off that skirt though.

Sharp-O wrote:I'll be honest, I didn't plan it that way! It was initially going to focus on the main trio (mainly Taro) but as the story went on and I wrote some of the one-shots, the group evolved over time, incorporating more characters until we have the cast now. In Reverie, Miki lamented that no one took Suzu seriously because of her narcolepsy and that it was a shame.

It's kinda how a fan fiction I'm planning out has ended up going, is supposed to be a point of view of ONE character has turned into point of view of several characters .

Sharp-O wrote:Hasn't got the hips to pull off that skirt though.

Turns out to be Kenji who sold him it , and Taro says its for recon

Hesmiyu wrote:

Sharp-O wrote:Hasn't got the hips to pull off that skirt though.

Turns out to be Kenji who sold him it , and Taro says its for recon

The last time I even suggested Kenji would make an appearance, HoneyBakedHam threatened violence

Sharp-O wrote:

Hesmiyu wrote:

Sharp-O wrote:Hasn't got the hips to pull off that skirt though.

Turns out to be Kenji who sold him it , and Taro says its for recon

The last time I even suggested Kenji would make an appearance, HoneyBakedHam threatened violence

If that's the case, then he'd hate a planned for of my planned story

Sharp-O wrote:

Hesmiyu wrote:

Sharp-O wrote:Hasn't got the hips to pull off that skirt though.

Turns out to be Kenji who sold him it , and Taro says its for recon

The last time I even suggested Kenji would make an appearance, HoneyBakedHam threatened violence

I do not recall this, good Sir. I believe I just told you to shut your mouth.

Okay, heavily implied

.....Okay, that I can't argue.

Mirage_GSM wrote:Waitwaitwait - They sell girls' uniforms to male students?
Creepy...

Well they sell the guys uniform to the girls.

Well, personally I don't consider girls in trousers all that unusual.
Guys in skirts, though…

Eh, probably some equality stuff

Mirage_GSM wrote:Well, personally I don't consider girls in trousers all that unusual.
Guys in skirts, though…

"Yeah man, sometimes you gotta' take going undercover to the next level."

swampie2 wrote:

"Yeah man, sometimes you gotta' take going undercover to the next level."

I'm not sure if it's good or not but it suits him?

Kenji is trans, that's the new headcanon.