Re: Hanako and Hisao –Road to Tokyo Conclusion Update!
Posted: Fri Sep 06, 2013 9:19 am
As I'm partly to blame for why you're so busy lately, I do apologize for that, and thank you for reading.
Now I gotta go find some Kenji/Emi fanfics.
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. I am glad that the proposal scene worked well, as it was the one that had me the most worried.
I kinda pulled a random pop singer from my memory, and she was the only one I actually knew that wasn't related to anime. Ironically because of that music video you posted way back when.Helbereth wrote: Anyway, first let me pose a question: Namie Amuro?
In another time, and another place, they could've called each other... lovers. Yeah, I noticed that, too. I ended up giving Emi a bit of a tsundere vibe, and thought it worked well, so I ran with it.Was anyone else reading the way Kenji and Emi were relating--throughout the tale--and interpreting it as repressed sexual tension? It seems to me that if they weren't at the wrong stage of their social existence--she being in a committed relationship, and him still unreasonably wary of women--they might have become quite the pair. Perhaps that's what I tapped into when I put them together as professional partners, though.
Now I gotta go find some Kenji/Emi fanfics.
Good thing I know what I'm doing for November FirstThe only bit that I felt was out of place is the issue with Misha nearly drinking herself into oblivion. It occurs late in the tale, and doesn't meet with a satisfying resolution, but perhaps you're planning a continuation thereof--something before the starting chapters of H&K. That said, it's written quite well, and having Hanako rise to the occasion as a voice of reason lends credence to her growth as a person.
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"Unnecessary and awkward yet perfectly reasonable" seems to be Kenji and Hisao's mantra these days, so thanksThen we come to the accidental proposal. Not that it was unexpected--I've been certain that's where the story was going since the antique shop--but it just happens so organically that they almost don't even notice. Having Hisao then clear the area--with Kenji's help--so he can get on one knee for a proper presentation almost felt awkward and unnecessary, but at the same time perfectly reasonable, and it gave the rest of the cast reason to spy from the shadows.
. I am glad that the proposal scene worked well, as it was the one that had me the most worried.Thanks, I figure I try to have fun and hope other people have fun along the way, and if anything more comes from it, all the better!When this started, I admit I was skeptical about it having much emotional weight, and I'm not a sort to have an outpouring of emotion over anything, but there were some truly touching parts here and there along with the verbal sniping, tweenage tomfoolery, and monkeys. As usual, there are technical flaws, a few incongruities, and a few basic disagreements over the portrayal of the various characters, but those are few and minor, and not enough to bring down the quality of this quaint, deceptively heartfelt novella.
Ave Imperator!Cheers! Also blarg!