Re: Restless
Posted: Tue Jul 17, 2012 12:49 pm
It's not a bad story, it just has some questionable aspects to it.
The way you rush through certain things using a detached narrator sometimes make it feel like I'm getting the summary of a story rather than the story itself, and you really need to start a new paragraph whenever a different character speaks.
The way you rush through certain things using a detached narrator sometimes make it feel like I'm getting the summary of a story rather than the story itself, and you really need to start a new paragraph whenever a different character speaks.