Re: Emi: The Lost Girl
Posted: Mon Oct 12, 2009 4:31 pm
Hmm, hmm.
A topic like this one sort of cries out for the writer himself to step in and make some sort of defense/explanation of why Emi was such a (let us be blunt, yes, blunt is good) nonentity in the Act 1 demo. Because she was, really, not that much of a star. Come on, look at how it ends! They have some food and then Hisao wanders off, basically. No big CG to cap things off, no fireworks, no nothin'.
Well now, isn't that a failing on the writer's part? I mean, this was for the Big Demo, and it was the chance for all of us to show as much as we could about the girls in order to build a following. More than that, it's the end of the first act, which should probably end with a bang, yeah?
Except Emi doesn't, and she doesn't for a couple of reasons that I figure ought to be understood:
First of all, Emi had no stake in the festival. She wasn't in charge of anything, and her club of choice (the track team, which is a team and not a club anyway) had nothing big going on. Sure, I guess she could have been involved in something for her classroom, but it wouldn't have anything to do with her in particular, really. I didn't want to give too much away about Emi as a character, so for all intents and purposes she had to be the 'normal' one here. Cheerful, a bit of a more aggressive interest in Hisao's health than the other girls, and a passion for running. Some of the comments I've read here have actually caught me a bit off guard in the way that people commenting on things I wasn't thinking about at the time will occasionally do--I was afraid; terribly so, that Emi was actually in worse shape than some of you have said.
But on the other hand, it was just the first act. And Emi didn't have much in the first act (not to mention most of the scenes with her were written by one of the other path writers, usually the writer of whichever girl happened to show up in Emi's scenes. This might sound like a cop-out to some, but I actually view it as more of a failure on my part to be more involved with the act one business. I fiddled with the scenes she's in, but only a few of them were wholly written by me. The festival was all me, so its lackadaisical ending is all me, which is really what most of the commentary on the path has had a problem with. So please, please understand that whatever you found lacking or didn't like about Emi's character was probably my doing). The plain truth is I didn't have much of an investment in the first act, being more concerned with what happens after the festival rather than all that introductory business. It sounds lousy to say "I know she wasn't much of an interesting character in the first act, but give it time and I promise she'll get better, honest!" but that's exactly what I'm saying. Emi gets better the more Hisao hangs out with her, which is generally how these things work, at least in my own head.
The end of the festival scene is something I regret and have in the past thought about going in and changing, if only to alleviate the sheer anticlimax of the end of the act. But it's not something I think will really be all that necessary come the full release, because there will be other things that will make the festival seem trivial by comparison.
The sex, for example, will be hilarious. Or excellent. Or both.
Hope this explains some things without raising too many other questions. If you have any questions, ask away. I'll answer them as clearly or opaquely as I can manage. This is your chance to finally call me out on ruining what would have been your favorite character! Don't let it slip by, lest my own short attention span forget that this topic exists!
EDIT: And yes, you could also try to just yell at me over IRC, but I don't get on very often and even when I do I am basically distracted most of the time. This is the best option for actually getting a reply.
A topic like this one sort of cries out for the writer himself to step in and make some sort of defense/explanation of why Emi was such a (let us be blunt, yes, blunt is good) nonentity in the Act 1 demo. Because she was, really, not that much of a star. Come on, look at how it ends! They have some food and then Hisao wanders off, basically. No big CG to cap things off, no fireworks, no nothin'.
Well now, isn't that a failing on the writer's part? I mean, this was for the Big Demo, and it was the chance for all of us to show as much as we could about the girls in order to build a following. More than that, it's the end of the first act, which should probably end with a bang, yeah?
Except Emi doesn't, and she doesn't for a couple of reasons that I figure ought to be understood:
First of all, Emi had no stake in the festival. She wasn't in charge of anything, and her club of choice (the track team, which is a team and not a club anyway) had nothing big going on. Sure, I guess she could have been involved in something for her classroom, but it wouldn't have anything to do with her in particular, really. I didn't want to give too much away about Emi as a character, so for all intents and purposes she had to be the 'normal' one here. Cheerful, a bit of a more aggressive interest in Hisao's health than the other girls, and a passion for running. Some of the comments I've read here have actually caught me a bit off guard in the way that people commenting on things I wasn't thinking about at the time will occasionally do--I was afraid; terribly so, that Emi was actually in worse shape than some of you have said.
But on the other hand, it was just the first act. And Emi didn't have much in the first act (not to mention most of the scenes with her were written by one of the other path writers, usually the writer of whichever girl happened to show up in Emi's scenes. This might sound like a cop-out to some, but I actually view it as more of a failure on my part to be more involved with the act one business. I fiddled with the scenes she's in, but only a few of them were wholly written by me. The festival was all me, so its lackadaisical ending is all me, which is really what most of the commentary on the path has had a problem with. So please, please understand that whatever you found lacking or didn't like about Emi's character was probably my doing). The plain truth is I didn't have much of an investment in the first act, being more concerned with what happens after the festival rather than all that introductory business. It sounds lousy to say "I know she wasn't much of an interesting character in the first act, but give it time and I promise she'll get better, honest!" but that's exactly what I'm saying. Emi gets better the more Hisao hangs out with her, which is generally how these things work, at least in my own head.
The end of the festival scene is something I regret and have in the past thought about going in and changing, if only to alleviate the sheer anticlimax of the end of the act. But it's not something I think will really be all that necessary come the full release, because there will be other things that will make the festival seem trivial by comparison.
The sex, for example, will be hilarious. Or excellent. Or both.
Hope this explains some things without raising too many other questions. If you have any questions, ask away. I'll answer them as clearly or opaquely as I can manage. This is your chance to finally call me out on ruining what would have been your favorite character! Don't let it slip by, lest my own short attention span forget that this topic exists!
EDIT: And yes, you could also try to just yell at me over IRC, but I don't get on very often and even when I do I am basically distracted most of the time. This is the best option for actually getting a reply.