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- Alpacalypse
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Re: Swampie's Stories: A new one-shot! 29/8/15
I haven't really had the luxury of taking part in the tea-based discussions that have been going on over the past few days, much to my chagrin - this makes up for it entirely!
Although, you may want to keep in mind that Scotland is not England - both are part of Britain. Yes, Lilly, Scotland is British, SHUT UP!
Although, you may want to keep in mind that Scotland is not England - both are part of Britain. Yes, Lilly, Scotland is British, SHUT UP!
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I also write now, apparently. Since everyone else does it, I'm putting it here
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I have also discovered that I'm a decent proofreader. Anybody with SPaG problems is free to PM me their work for a thorough analysis and/or evisceration. Depends on how I'm feeling.
Re: Swampie's Stories: A new one-shot! 29/8/15
For that pun, you deserve death, but the writing has earned you a stay of execution.swampie2 wrote:The Tea Wars: A Battle is Brewing
I can't help but feel bad for Hisao, even if he's ultimately responsible for this situation himself by straying. But to be denied for a whole week, not to taste that hot, sweet nectar...
... you know, I think I'm just going to stop there before this gets any weirder.
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Re: Swampie's Stories: A new one-shot! 29/8/15
I'm surprised he survived a day let alone a week. I have several a daySkeeve wrote:For that pun, you deserve death, but the writing has earned you a stay of execution.swampie2 wrote:The Tea Wars: A Battle is Brewing
I can't help but feel bad for Hisao, even if he's ultimately responsible for this situation himself by straying. But to be denied for a whole week, not to taste that hot, sweet nectar...
... you know, I think I'm just going to stop there before this gets any weirder.
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Re: Swampie's Stories: A new one-shot! 29/8/15
Alternate universeAlpacalypse wrote:Although, you may want to keep in mind that Scotland is not England - both are part of Britain.
That's what he gets for 'cheating'Skeeve wrote:I can't help but feel bad for Hisao, even if he's ultimately responsible for this situation himself by straying. But to be denied for a whole week, not to taste that hot, sweet nectar...
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Re: Swampie's Stories: A new one-shot! 29/8/15
swampie2 wrote:The Tea Wars: A Battle is Brewing
You, good sir, have outdone yourself. The concept, the dialogue and the execution all come together, like a good cup of tea, to create a golden nectar of brilliance. It's also funny as fuck!
Is Hisao playing along both a Lilly and Molly route? Interesting concept and definitely a cool pay-off. Though, because I've been watching Shimoneta, as soon as Lilly started talking, I instantly thought of Anna and what was in the tea...
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Re: Swampie's Stories: A new one-shot! 29/8/15
...too late. It got weirder.
Re: Swampie's Stories: A new one-shot! 29/8/15
Thanks sharp! I really enjoyed writing this one, that over the top style of things is quite different than the stuff I usually write.Sharp-O wrote:Is Hisao playing along both a Lilly and Molly route? Interesting concept and definitely a cool pay-off.
Hisao is on Lilly's route, but Molly wants some of that sweet ass.
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Re: Swampie's Stories: A new one-shot! 29/8/15
Not gonna like, at first I thought Hisao was cheating on Lilly. I was relieved to see it was just a tea thing, even though I'm not really a big fan of the stuff(Go Team Water!).
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Re: Swampie's Stories: A new one-shot! 29/8/15
That was the vibe I was going for, I re-wrote that first part about three times trying to get it to look like they just did the deed.AntonSlavik020 wrote:Not gonna like, at first I thought Hisao was cheating on Lilly. I was relieved to see it was just a tea thing, even though I'm not really a big fan of the stuff(Go Team Water!).
I don't drink tea myself either, some would say i'm a failure of a brit, team carbonated go!
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Re: Swampie's Stories: A new one-shot! 29/8/15
AntonSlavik020 wrote:Not gonna like, at first I thought Hisao was cheating on Lilly. I was relieved to see it was just a tea thing, even though I'm not really a big fan of the stuff(Go Team Water!).
Are you kidding? He WAS cheating on Lilly! When your girlfriend has a speciality, you don't just go and share that meal with her rival. It's tantamount to a betrayal! Nay, I say it is a betrayal.
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Re: Swampie's Stories: A new one-shot! 29/8/15
Well, I didn't realize it was about tea, but THAT didn't cross my mind either. I thought she had been cooking or something like that.swampie2 wrote:That was the vibe I was going for, I re-wrote that first part about three times trying to get it to look like they just did the deed.AntonSlavik020 wrote:Not gonna like, at first I thought Hisao was cheating on Lilly. I was relieved to see it was just a tea thing, even though I'm not really a big fan of the stuff(Go Team Water!).
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Re: Swampie's Stories: A sad story 18/9/15
A sad story.
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"So you're going to see each other again, huh..." Miki idly mirrors the information I'd just given her.
"Mhmm." A nod is all I can return, as my emotions conflict inside my head. The the cold grip of sadness battles with the warm feelings of happiness while nervousness watches intently.
"You can call me if you need to, okay?" She offers, though I hope not to need it.
"Sure." I reply, still attempting to make heads or tails of how I'm feeling. After a short pat on the back, Miki makes her way out of the room and closes the door gingerly. Some would say it's strange to see her be this serious, but after Yamaku her personality matured in strangely normal ways. I suppose we've all grown to be quite normal, he has more than anyone else by far.
I'll leave the station at five pm, with connections at six thirty, eight and nine thirty. It'll be a long ride over there, but it'll help me, somehow, I can just feel it. It might bring closure to the relationship that never really ended, or it might just open old wounds and salt them. Either way, this is something that I have to do. Something that we have to do.
"It's been quite cold here, it's even snowed a few times. I see it's been chilly over there as well, I hope you're holding up well."
His letter rings through my mind, I can almost hear his voice. When I received this letter, all I could think about was the letter I received all those years ago. I think that is why I'm so determined this time around, after I read that letter, all I did was wallow in my own self pity. That's something I want to prove, to myself, and to him. That I'm not the coward I seemed to be.
"I finally finished my exams for this year, I didn't get the results I wanted, but I'm still quite pleased with what I got. My parents, however, are not as pleased as I am."
I shrug on my coat and grab my keys before slotting them into my pocket. I've changed a lot since we last saw each other, we might not even recognize each other.
As I step outside, producing a soft crunch under my foot as the snow gives way, the cold bites into my skin. I slowly become aware of my rapidly numbing nose and decide it's time to start walking. One foot after the other, I begin carving my way through the snow toward the station.
"I think they will come around though, my results are still above the average, luckily. I'm not sure what made me lose focus, but I'm sure my next exams will come back with much higher results. I hope you can tell me about how your exams went."
As the PA system crunches to life, I come to a stop at the edge of the yellow line. The next train is set to arrive soon, according to the large screen behind me, so I decide to forgo taking a seat. After a couple of minutes of considering what he might look like now, the train pulls into the station and slows to a stop. I take a deep breath of cold air and throw myself forward with all my willpower, some say the first step is the hardest, and I'd be inclined to agree.
"Our home is quite large, I was expecting a little less so I was awestruck when I finally arrived. My room is huge, almost as big as two of the Yamaku dorm rooms put together. It's a little sparsely decorated right now, but eventually I hope to cover the walls with memories."
The train skims across it's tracks, idly clacking as it moves. Usually I'd use my phone to pass the time on trains, but today feels different. Perhaps because we didn't use the variety of modern ways to communicate over long distances.
"I've had a rough time settling into new living quarters, but I know that It'll feel like home soon enough. Today I had take out, it was disgusting and beautiful all at the same time. Do you ever feel that way about fast food?"
The train doors lie open, as they have for several minutes now, draining the warm air from the bus. The cold brushes past me on it's way into the bus, causing the other three or four passengers to groan. The old man sat beside me grumbles and reaches over before hitting the close door button, causing the large metal doors to slide shut, sealing the cold air out. I offer a short apology to the man while snapping from my thoughts, he simply waves to dispel the idea that I was at fault.
If I had to pick the most likely thing that would go wrong today, I wouldn't have picked that the trains would be delayed.
"Despite the cold, results and fast food, I've had a great time here so far. I hope you can visit soon, I'd love to show you around."
After the third connection being delayed, I'm two hours late. I sigh to myself, hoping to ready myself for the comments I'll get from him for arriving late to a meeting we agreed to, and find that thought very cosy. I step from the train, the air now much colder than before. I step past the small booth of the station and make my way down the steps being careful not to slip, falling now would be a cruel twist of fate. Making my way through the small village, I'm guided by the sound of snow crunching under my feet.
"If you ever feel like visiting, then let me know and I'll pay for the travel, that's the least I could do. You're always welcome, we have more than enough space. Hope to hear back from you soon."
I slowly kneel down in the snow, producing another crunch that fills the silent air. Removing the slightly overused letter from my pocket, I read it through one last time. If only I had responded sooner, maybe this letter wouldn't have been the first and last he sent. I blink my now tear filled eyes and adjust my grip on the piece of paper before ripping it in two, and again, and again until all that's left is confetti. The small scraps of paper fall from my hands as I open them, my tears now running down my face.
"I miss you, Kenji." I mutter as I reach forward, placing a hand on the grave in front of me.
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"So you're going to see each other again, huh..." Miki idly mirrors the information I'd just given her.
"Mhmm." A nod is all I can return, as my emotions conflict inside my head. The the cold grip of sadness battles with the warm feelings of happiness while nervousness watches intently.
"You can call me if you need to, okay?" She offers, though I hope not to need it.
"Sure." I reply, still attempting to make heads or tails of how I'm feeling. After a short pat on the back, Miki makes her way out of the room and closes the door gingerly. Some would say it's strange to see her be this serious, but after Yamaku her personality matured in strangely normal ways. I suppose we've all grown to be quite normal, he has more than anyone else by far.
I'll leave the station at five pm, with connections at six thirty, eight and nine thirty. It'll be a long ride over there, but it'll help me, somehow, I can just feel it. It might bring closure to the relationship that never really ended, or it might just open old wounds and salt them. Either way, this is something that I have to do. Something that we have to do.
"It's been quite cold here, it's even snowed a few times. I see it's been chilly over there as well, I hope you're holding up well."
His letter rings through my mind, I can almost hear his voice. When I received this letter, all I could think about was the letter I received all those years ago. I think that is why I'm so determined this time around, after I read that letter, all I did was wallow in my own self pity. That's something I want to prove, to myself, and to him. That I'm not the coward I seemed to be.
"I finally finished my exams for this year, I didn't get the results I wanted, but I'm still quite pleased with what I got. My parents, however, are not as pleased as I am."
I shrug on my coat and grab my keys before slotting them into my pocket. I've changed a lot since we last saw each other, we might not even recognize each other.
As I step outside, producing a soft crunch under my foot as the snow gives way, the cold bites into my skin. I slowly become aware of my rapidly numbing nose and decide it's time to start walking. One foot after the other, I begin carving my way through the snow toward the station.
"I think they will come around though, my results are still above the average, luckily. I'm not sure what made me lose focus, but I'm sure my next exams will come back with much higher results. I hope you can tell me about how your exams went."
As the PA system crunches to life, I come to a stop at the edge of the yellow line. The next train is set to arrive soon, according to the large screen behind me, so I decide to forgo taking a seat. After a couple of minutes of considering what he might look like now, the train pulls into the station and slows to a stop. I take a deep breath of cold air and throw myself forward with all my willpower, some say the first step is the hardest, and I'd be inclined to agree.
"Our home is quite large, I was expecting a little less so I was awestruck when I finally arrived. My room is huge, almost as big as two of the Yamaku dorm rooms put together. It's a little sparsely decorated right now, but eventually I hope to cover the walls with memories."
The train skims across it's tracks, idly clacking as it moves. Usually I'd use my phone to pass the time on trains, but today feels different. Perhaps because we didn't use the variety of modern ways to communicate over long distances.
"I've had a rough time settling into new living quarters, but I know that It'll feel like home soon enough. Today I had take out, it was disgusting and beautiful all at the same time. Do you ever feel that way about fast food?"
The train doors lie open, as they have for several minutes now, draining the warm air from the bus. The cold brushes past me on it's way into the bus, causing the other three or four passengers to groan. The old man sat beside me grumbles and reaches over before hitting the close door button, causing the large metal doors to slide shut, sealing the cold air out. I offer a short apology to the man while snapping from my thoughts, he simply waves to dispel the idea that I was at fault.
If I had to pick the most likely thing that would go wrong today, I wouldn't have picked that the trains would be delayed.
"Despite the cold, results and fast food, I've had a great time here so far. I hope you can visit soon, I'd love to show you around."
After the third connection being delayed, I'm two hours late. I sigh to myself, hoping to ready myself for the comments I'll get from him for arriving late to a meeting we agreed to, and find that thought very cosy. I step from the train, the air now much colder than before. I step past the small booth of the station and make my way down the steps being careful not to slip, falling now would be a cruel twist of fate. Making my way through the small village, I'm guided by the sound of snow crunching under my feet.
"If you ever feel like visiting, then let me know and I'll pay for the travel, that's the least I could do. You're always welcome, we have more than enough space. Hope to hear back from you soon."
I slowly kneel down in the snow, producing another crunch that fills the silent air. Removing the slightly overused letter from my pocket, I read it through one last time. If only I had responded sooner, maybe this letter wouldn't have been the first and last he sent. I blink my now tear filled eyes and adjust my grip on the piece of paper before ripping it in two, and again, and again until all that's left is confetti. The small scraps of paper fall from my hands as I open them, my tears now running down my face.
"I miss you, Kenji." I mutter as I reach forward, placing a hand on the grave in front of me.
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Last edited by swampie2 on Wed Sep 23, 2015 11:18 am, edited 1 time in total.
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Re: Swampie's Stories: A sad story 18/9/15
It's obviously Suzu.
Post-Yamaku, what happens? After The Dream is a mosaic that follows everyone to the (sometimes) bitter end.
Main Index (Complete)—Shizune/Lilly/Emi/Hanako/Rin/Misha + Miki + Natsume
Secondary Arcs: Rika/Mutou/Akira • Hideaki | Others (WIP): Straw—A Dream of Suzu • Sakura—The Kenji Saga.
"Much has been lost, and there is much left to lose." — Tim Powers, The Drawing of the Dark (1979)
Main Index (Complete)—Shizune/Lilly/Emi/Hanako/Rin/Misha + Miki + Natsume
Secondary Arcs: Rika/Mutou/Akira • Hideaki | Others (WIP): Straw—A Dream of Suzu • Sakura—The Kenji Saga.
"Much has been lost, and there is much left to lose." — Tim Powers, The Drawing of the Dark (1979)
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Re: Swampie's Stories: A sad story 18/9/15
a) Seems she is more than just two hours late.
b) Thankfully(?) Kenji is not in a position to complain much.
b) Thankfully(?) Kenji is not in a position to complain much.
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Re: Swampie's Stories: A sad story 18/9/15
I don't know if this is a sad story (well, I didn't get any feels so that's just me) but leaving the POV open to interpretation is an interesting choice at least.
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Sharp-O's One-Shots! - Preludes, pilots, and prolonged arcs
Monomyth - Taro's tale of life, love and silly heroics (Complete - 107,909 words + tie-ins)
Miraimyth - In the future year of 2018; there's new students, new problems, and the same old Yamaku. (Complete, Standalone, Miniseries)