Can You Remember Me? An Amnesiac Story [Updated 10/26/15]

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azumeow
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Squee.
"I don’t want to be here anymore, I know there’s nothing left worth staying for.
Your paradise is something I’ve endured
See I don’t think I can fight this anymore, I’m listening with one foot out the door
And something has to die to be reborn-I don’t want to be here anymore"
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Th.... thank you? :D
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I liked this chapter, though kinda disappointed the nurse did not pick up on her finding his office by herself.
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Gajzla wrote:I liked this chapter, though kinda disappointed the nurse did not pick up on her finding his office by herself.
Yeah, I was looking forward to what he had to say about that too.

Anyways, I'm glad Seiki finally told Hisao she has amnesia. I'm not a big fan of people hiding their disability from their friends.
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Hmm... perhaps doctor-patient confidentiality? The Nurse wouldn't want Hisao knowing what he isn't supposed to know.
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bubeez wrote:Hmm... perhaps doctor-patient confidentiality? The Nurse wouldn't want Hisao knowing what he isn't supposed to know.
Didn't think about that. That actually makes sense.
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azumeow wrote:Squee.
Seconded! This fic is just so adorable.
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AntonSlavik020 wrote:
Gajzla wrote:I liked this chapter, though kinda disappointed the nurse did not pick up on her finding his office by herself.
Yeah, I was looking forward to what he had to say about that too.

Anyways, I'm glad Seiki finally told Hisao she has amnesia. I'm not a big fan of people hiding their disability from their friends.
Hisao in most routes that aren't Emi's? :lol:
I write take a look, would you kindly?
I also draw, kind of.
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I'm going to try and make cover art soon. Although I'm afraid to crush all of your headcanons lol. I've been avoiding appearance for quite a while.
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Drew this to procrastinate lol. I really need to learn how to properly shade

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I love the art there, especially the cheesy high-schools romance initials on the tree. :P
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Glad I found this fic, it's pretty cute!
Rin > Shizune > Emi > Hanako > Lilly
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Thanks, it means a lot to hear that :D
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I guess it’s about time I comment on this.

Now that you’ve gotten this far, you’re showing talent. I didn’t like the choppy style at first, but it fits so well with your OC. Also, I think you’ve gotten better at it, finding a balance between abruptness and… progress? Not sure what I’m trying to convey with that thought. Anyway, it’s better.

One typo I noticed:
Dream-like, but so realistic its terrifyingly beautiful.
A rare one; usually people are guilty of putting in an apostrophe when they aren’t supposed to.
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Progress? I'll take it :) Thank you!

I've definitely conflicted with the writing style. There was a point in the story where I lost my footing. I lost faith in the fact that the reader could continue each chapter as if no time had passed since the last one, and I kept writing as if each chapter needed to be standalone... but that really breaks the abrupt writing style and Seiki's lofty-headed viewpoint.

So, dear readers. (it's been a while since I've called you all that!) Thanks for being patient with me. And I won't lose faith in you all. Next chapter soon!
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