Incidentally in relation to the above post. Seems like another series of coincidences.
I could always fix that, I guess. I feel like a phone conversation would be too awkward, after all this time, but I don’t know… Maybe I could send a letter.
heh
I shouldn’t be living in the past, anyway. It’s only going to make me more unhappy, and it only person really affected by it is me.
the only person
“I have visitors?”
“Yes, there are two people here to see you.”
[...]
I haven’t the slightest idea who this is. My eyes meet hers...
…!
…With a flash of alarming clarity, my entire body goes rigid with tension.
Called it! ...In my head anyway, even if it appears incredibly obvious in hindsight, I didn't want to ruin it for anybody
...How are you any different from a drunk driver who only feels bad after he finally spins out and murders half a family?”
She makes a noise that’s somewhere between a gasp and a sob, as though I’ve touched upon a particularly sensitive spot, but I’m too far gone to stop now.
...Ouch. Can't wait till this one comes back to haunt Iwanako. That will
sting.
That went slightly more awful than I imagined. Although to be fair, I had two guesses. It was either Emi or Hanako, but
obviously that's not going to---
“I… Iwa…o..”
Huh? What was that?
“I, Iwanako?”
The soft voice is so quiet that, for a moment, I think I’m imagining it.
I lift my head, surprised to hear my name. To my surprise, when I glance over to the doorway, a very familiar amethyst-eyed girl is peering at me cautiously from behind the doorway, her nose hidden behind the door frame.
Huh?!
“Hanako?!”
Oh. Damn you. Damn you damn you
damn you I should have seen this coming.
Attack on Titan has exhausted my Epic Cliffhanger-O-Meter for a decade as it is, and now this? I think I'm gonna have a stroke, here.
Yeah, I was going to comment to the effect of Hanako's assertiveness but you've already duly noted that. Besides excellent first impressions, I'm guessing Lilly has something to do with it, but beyond homework or the Festival I can't quite think of anything concrete. Unless it's the typical "I told Lilly and she convinced me", I'm totally stumped. In fact, I'd say
bhtooefr nailed it. Although I must say, the
"Word of God" concerning Lilly at the end of this post renders this chapter in a whole new light...
More to the point, I'm more surprised at that it didn't come down to Emi or Hanako as the visitor, but
both. Quoth Rin Tezuka, "It sure is suddenly very crowded in here. I didn't know I was this popular." It almost feels silly, but genuine concern tends to have that effect on the cynical. But it isn't as if Iwanako was feeling exactly chipper before.
You pulled all the stops for this one, Leaty.
Personally yes, I believe you have turned Iwanako into her own person and a fully fleshed out human being. She has friends, a family, hopes, dreams, struggles, baggage and regrets like the rest of us. I even forget that she is canonically just the one-scene catalyst for
Katawa Shoujo's male main character, sometimes, instead of a quasi-OC you created wholecloth.
The twists and turns in
MTB are always a thrill to read through. My hat's off to you.
Now all that's left is Rin and her "diagnosing" the "chest problem thingy"...
I also have a new competing hypothesis as to who's gonna fix Iwanako's heart, but let's not get ahead of ourselves, here. More evidence required and all that scientific method stuff.