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Hey, it's looking great so far. I just noticed a couple small errors that bugged my eye. When quoting inside of a quote, you're supposed to use apostrophes. When Hisao is "talking" to Rin, for example, she should say, "I meant the other 'red,'" with an apostrophe, followed by quotations, at the end ...

Quite nice. Good to see a Rin continuation that doesn't skip the rest of the school year. If you continue this, I recommend creating a new reply rather than adding to your first post. I almost missed the fact that you changed it between my first looking at this thread and my reply. Glad you liked ...

I think it's a good start. One minor nitpick, though: Rin falling asleep on command kind of threw my suspension of disbelief on the floor and stomped on it's head. That happens in the game, no? On the bench during the fireworks. And in the atelier, after the h-scene. No less, I added some space in ...

# 2 wrote:I think it's a good start. One minor nitpick, though: Rin falling asleep on command kind of threw my suspension of disbelief on the floor and stomped on it's head.

That happens in the game, no?
On the bench during the fireworks. And in the atelier, after the h-scene.

That would make him the second youngest winner of a Nobel Prize. The youngest was 25. The next four were all 31. All of those were in physics. The youngest winner in medicine was 32. And he did it in 1923. Whatever. It's your story. Don't let me stop you. Like I said, I enjoyed it. No problems. The ...

Original paste: http://pastebin.com/4xfLia8K Now entering it's last stages. Not sure if I want to push through and try my hand at smut, but this is as far as the "story" portion of the writing will go. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Something is poking my head, trying to wake ...

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Andonymos wrote:

Mirage_GSM wrote:I think this is one of the best Rin pov stories I've ever read... Not that there are very many but still!

Y-you too.

Yeah, why?

Uh... it's a parody of a nervous person thanking someone.

TheSongofRaven wrote:Ok, so Hisao is passed away and....his eyes was given to Lilly ? Man, this was so sad

No, his research lead to Lilly gaining her eyesight back. But all that's left of him are pictures.

That's a great idea, though. I wish I could have tied that in...

Seriously Great, still very gut wrenching (I forgot I had read this on your pastebin and thought it was a repost) Gah, I forgot the original paste, didn't I? It's in there now. Beautiful story.No idea what else to say... Glad you liked it. Very nice. I knew how it was going to end, but it was still ...

Okay. Another write that I did, though I remember this one not being terribly well received. I like it, though. http://pastebin.com/9nAe4nFv Original idea was from an Anon, posted a couple months ago. If you read this, thanks. Title is from "Pictures of Lily," by The Who. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Not sure if ...

I think this is one of the best Rin pov stories I've ever read... Not that there are very many but still! Y-you too. It's pretty good, although the characterization seems to shift a bit. In the beginning, Rin seems far too normal, you even make a point of saying she's not weird anymore, but a few ...

Still, I wonder what it is about the neutral ending that people just won't leave alone despite feeling like the most honest ending. Sometimes things just don't work out, people. Happy endings are lies created by stopping the story when it's most convenient. I would have ended it at the part where ...

Hello, KS Forums.I'm completely new here. I've posted a couple stories on 4chan in the past, and an Anon suggested I come here in order to improve my writing, and my stories. So, here I am. This was my first completed work of fiction, but I'm fairly satisfied with the outcome. Please enjoy ...