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- Wed Apr 11, 2012 5:06 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Real (A Suzu/OC Story) Chapter 16 Now Up
- Replies: 198
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Re: Real (A Suzu/OC story)
If you want real advic, wait for Mirage. Thanks for the vote of confidence, but there's not much I can say about the story yet. No mistakes that jumped at me, nice writing style, and best of all you didn't feel compelled to spell out every last bit of background about yout OC during the first three...
- Wed Apr 11, 2012 3:24 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Real (A Suzu/OC Story) Chapter 16 Now Up
- Replies: 198
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Re: Real (A Suzu/OC story)
d'oh, thought I got that. I'll fix it.Mahorfeus wrote:Just one thing I spotted. You need spaces after your commas.
- Wed Apr 11, 2012 1:50 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Real (A Suzu/OC Story) Chapter 16 Now Up
- Replies: 198
- Views: 80742
Re: Real (A Suzu/OC story)
Yeah, I see where you're coming from. I kinda put that whole "wispy voice" line and Suzu's reply in as a joke,lol. Thanks for the critique though
- Wed Apr 11, 2012 1:05 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Real (A Suzu/OC Story) Chapter 16 Now Up
- Replies: 198
- Views: 80742
Real (A Suzu/OC Story) Chapter 16 Now Up
Herro everyone. So I've been lurking the board for a while, just got off my lazy ass to join and figured I'd write a story. Now yes, this does contain an OC, and I know how everyone feels about them, but, well, eh... Anyway, comments and critiques are appreciated, even if you tell me I'm horrible an...