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BigDoktor wrote:In any case, are there any other sites that this community WOULDN'T look down upon? Like a more respectable fanfiction site...? I'd be grateful to know of any.

Uh...this forum?

griffon8 wrote:Why is Lilly back for Hisao if he wasn't honest with her? Hisao no longer deserves Lilly. He lost that with the first lie.

While she only neglected to mention that she was moving to live on the other side of the world, even if Hisao was honest with her.

Gotta go real fast Even if I don't have legs Really Really fast One too many syllables on the first line. Replace 'Gotta' with 'Must'? Gott (1) -a (2) go (3) real (4) fast (5) Tezuka's art shines, If only she would accept the help I offer. Nomiya Fair enough, I'd pronounce it ree-uhl , but a check ...

I like this! While not really a girl, I couldn't resist: High School Science Class Most of them are Ignorants Just Hisao gets it Yeah, I was never good at poetry. One too many syllables on the last line. Replacing 'Hisao' with 'Nakai' works (Unless I can't pronounce Nakai right, you never know ...

I was afraid of that. But really its my first try and I knew it was going to be far from perfect. If I am going to get comments though, I would really like to get some constructive criticism and points on what I could have done differently. I think the main thing in terms of your writing is that ...

random wrote:you keep your fat, ugly lezbo away from hanako

But Hanako x Misha is OTP

I remember reading a story exactly like this a while ago, by CrossRook I think.

Double spacing pleeeeeease.

I don't really have answers to the first two, so yeah, let's go for 'Suspension of Disbelief' I think Treading Water is probably my favourite thing in here too, so i'm glad you like it! Uh, what exactly do you want more of? Hanako and Hisao's blossoming friendship in Emi's route? And about Rin's ...

Perhaps a missed opportunity to use an old metaphor for orgasm as "clouds and rain"? Seems particularly appropriate for Rin for the use of rain and clouds as symbols throughout her route... as well as her soaking her pillow in such a fashion. Hrm, I didn't think of that. I thought 'clouds and rain ...

Rin's Itch -------------------------- My paintbrush dangles between my two favourite toes, ready to paint the blank canvas in front of me. Ready to paint…something anyway. I can’t remember what anymore. It’s this itch that I’m feeling, impossible to paint with it. Itch. Itch. Itch. Itch. It’s taking ...

Hoitash wrote:It looks to be just a temp ban, though, so there's hope writing-wise.

It's permanent. You can find his writing in other places with a tiny bit of effort. (But it's not allowed to be posted here.)

>Having fun

That's just silly, and not at all healthy. Shame on you.

lolawesome wrote:Aw man, why'd you end it right at the part I want to read more of? Face_Sad

Because he got banned, mainly.

A well as getting a proof reader for this and any future work you do, you should ditch the script format for dialogue too.