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You want to say it was all a complicated attempt at murder by giving him a heart attack in a way that nobody would ever expect... well, you're going to have to work a bit for that one.... Well, writing a yandere Lilly would be pretty... interesting. It might give her character some... well ...

Oddball wrote:I think we're straying a bit. Let's leave the canon discussion to the main forums and keep this topic about the guy's story.

To be fair, the two are directly connected. Can't really have the 'story' I posted without the discussion topic at hand.

Why is Lilly back for Hisao if he wasn't honest with her? Hisao no longer deserves Lilly. He lost that with the first lie. While she only neglected to mention that she was moving to live on the other side of the world, even if Hisao was honest with her. So the question begs: is a lie of omission ...

AusJake wrote:Whoa Whoa... back up.....
Who did Hisao run into?
Lily?
Or just some random?
Or did i miss something?
I may have missed something...

Nice little story though.
I enjoyed it.

I tried to make it clear, and I'm sorry if I failed in that. He did bump into Lilly, yes!

Sorry, but I don't see any reason for this story except for a gratuitious desire to turn a bad ending into a good one. The writing itself is nothing to complain about, but the story could have just as well stayed unwritten. You've summed my own feelings about this piece up better than I ever could ...

I don’t really want to be here. The music is loud enough to feel like a physical presence, and the noise of dozens of other students trying to make themselves heard doesn’t improve the sound. The lights above my head are dim and flickering, but nobody seems to have any trouble finding their way acr ...

I like where this is going. I wonder how they are going to encounter the girls. The first line Hisao said as well as this one Kenji shook his head. are in past tense, while most of the text is in present. Just sayin'. Thank you! I have a lot of problems keeping my writing in the same tense, so I ...

Well this was kind of just drifting in my Google Docs for a few days but I'll throw it out here. Had a request weeks back for a story about Hisao and Kenji in a honest-to-god Feminist War. This isn't much and it is poorly written, but it is what it is. Feminist Wars - Part One? http://pastebin.com ...

Thanks for the feedback, everyone. I like the idea of expanding on this little piece. Thanks for the idea!

First, I'll say hello. I've been a long time KS reader and fan. I've spent most of my time discussing KS in other places, but I was told I ought to sign up on the official forums for the sake of feedback. This is not, by a long shot, the first thing I've written in terms of KS fan fiction (oh god ...