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Not bad for a first attempt. A little cliche maybe at times, a few mistakes, but a decent start.

Glad I found this fic, it's pretty cute!

Hmm... drama is afoot! That's quite an odd circumstance though... either Shizune really is a bad ghost and Misha is also being manipulated, or else shouldn't she be well aware of what has happened and that Shizune can't seem to get Hisao's attention anymore? I'm suprised she hasn't said something ...

That was pretty cool. The endings felt a little forced in both cases but it was a fun journey getting there.

Mirage_GSM wrote:I'm waiting to see just how close you're going to stick to the anime in chapter XIII.

Er... stick to what anime? Is this a fusion with some other work I don't recognize?

Nope, I refuse to believe such lies about Shizune. Must be some other spirit that is trying to piggyback Hisao's connection to Shizune to do it's wicked deeds. Surely that notebook will solve the case!

Yay!

Hmm... what if there are actually 2 of her? Could work like Wraith:The Oblivion RPG from back in the day, with a self-destructive 'shadow' personality actively trying to undermine everything keeping her from moving on.

Well, this was a pleasant surprise. A bit hard to follow (especially the first few paragraphs), but after a little while it just clicks and it reads smooth as anything, like reading Shakespear and having to make an effort to stop thinking like that after you finish.

There's a reason Lilly is last in my preference list. Different strokes for different folks I guess. The biggest thing that just kills it for me is that pretty much nobody every moves on. It's quite rare for someone to end up marrying a high school sweetheart, but for all the rest of the girls to ...

Read some of this... 'mosaic'? It's an interesting idea structure-wise, but the plot itself is a total letdown. Sorry, but this is soap-opera levels of melodrama and I just can't get into it.

Amusing, but awkward as hell. Seems just right.

Yay! I don't have a whole lot to say about this one... lots of setup, not much actual happening... but it's great that you're writting again.

Huh, must have missed this one earlier. Sad as it is, this one is a much stronger effort.

Not bad. a little meandering at the start, and nothing too revolutionary, but it gets the job done.

Damn it Hisao, this is not how harem comedy works. Get it together man.