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Part Six, Thanks to CommnderShepard for giving it a go over. The Date It is just after noon when I chased Hisao up the stairs to his bedroom, taking a quick moment to take in the history that made him, him. The room did not feel abandoned like you think it would, after not being lived in for a bette...

Very entertaining. Will be looking out for more.

Good story, I always saw Muto as a introspective kinda person.

(reading that it was a Doomish story made me weary of continuing, considering I like, you know, life in general. I'm glad I finished this.)

Guestdude wrote:Man, this is good stuff; wish I could write Rin as well, but though she's my favourite KS girl, I just can't seem to 'get' her.

And while her route taught me that that's okay, it doesn't help with writing her

Thanks for the vote of confidence!

I liked it but it feels rushed, like you could comfortably double the word count just by being clearer/more descriptive about certain things. It was kind of rushed, I wanted try to write something with out thinking to much about it. Kind of like a personal challenge I guess. Though, I may do a rewr...

A one shot I wrote, just on a whim. Hanako nuzzled into Hisaos chest after, well one would not call it love making. How about just sex. Yes that is what it was after all. Hanako didn't mind though, she loved the man, well no, the boy that was laying beside her. They both had a long way to go before ...

Actually, once I got past the first chapter in the second set of stories you've posted, it got easier to read. And I did end up enjoying it, I didn't find it fluffy though, not like some of the other stories out there.

If anyone could help me out with some proof reading, It would be greatly appreciated.

Mirage_GSM wrote:Tenses.
Keep to one of them.

Thanks, I'll fix them when I find them.

I'm no expert, but I found the second set of stories hard to read. The characters didn't seem to flow. Some of the wording threw me off too.

Part 5 (This is longer than I thought it would be.) Memory lane. After awhile my parents fall silent, as silent as Rin sitting beside me. I can't help but worry about her. I accept her for her, but I don't think she's happy with those periods either where she seems lost. She'd probably kick me for t...

Good to know, English wasn't my strongest subject to say the least. Also little worried that people wouldn't pick up on the alternating view points.

Daitengu wrote:You sir, have great punctuation lol

That sarcasm?

..... the feels... thanks for the inspiration.

Part four, enjoy. Going home: He's a pacer, didn't figure him for one. Not surprised though. “Hello mother, how are you?” I tune out the conversation, or I try to. He runs his hands though his hair a lot too. With one piece always popping back up. Makes him stand out in a crowd. I wonder what he'd l...