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by Ascended Flutist
Sun Apr 22, 2012 3:19 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: And to Live in Peace -Post Hanako's Good End- (Ch4 up)
Replies: 123
Views: 92326

Re: And to Live in Peace -Post Hanako's Good End- (Ch2 up)

I am enjoying the story thus far, though like others have said, there is quite a bit of dead air in there towards the end. At which point exactly ? I honestly thought the Enhanced Edition addressed that. *Thoughts and ideas* Those are interesting. I'll put it in the idle brainstorming area, though ...
by Ascended Flutist
Sun Apr 22, 2012 5:27 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: And to Live in Peace -Post Hanako's Good End- (Ch4 up)
Replies: 123
Views: 92326

Re: And to Live in Peace -Post Hanako's Good End- (Ch2 up)

Fair enough, he is portrayed as a lil nerve dead when it comes to things that would make a typical person embarrassed. Which is odd, considering he got a heart attack from being confessed to. I wonder if that was a conscious decision so the player could "fit in his shoes" so to speak more...
by Ascended Flutist
Sun Apr 22, 2012 4:18 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: And to Live in Peace -Post Hanako's Good End- (Ch4 up)
Replies: 123
Views: 92326

Re: And to Live in Peace -Post Hanako's Good End- (Ch2 up)

It came out non-emotional because Hisao not only had thirty minutes to recover from the initial embarrassment, but also he's only dealing with Misha, a friend. He can manage to remain aloof, and his answers are purposefully aloof, so as to deter her. Same goes with Miki, where he only goes " ho...
by Ascended Flutist
Sat Apr 21, 2012 1:24 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: And to Live in Peace -Post Hanako's Good End- (Ch4 up)
Replies: 123
Views: 92326

Re: And to Live in Peace -Post Hanako's Good End- (Ch2 up)

No snorting. The brick has to go through your mouth, otherwise it doesn't count as eating. Therefore, you cannot mix it with liquid either, that would count as drinking. A paste is okay though.
by Ascended Flutist
Sat Apr 21, 2012 8:20 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: And to Live in Peace -Post Hanako's Good End- (Ch4 up)
Replies: 123
Views: 92326

Re: And to Live in Peace -Post Hanako's Good End- (Ch2 up)

Post no longer reserved for future update. Due to one extra page worth of feedback for Ch2, I have decided to release Ch3 in page 4, so that the actual chapter and subsequent feedback wouldn't be too out-of-sync. I beg for thy forgiveness, Ô Almighty Moderator. Alright, annoucement time : From Wedne...
by Ascended Flutist
Sat Apr 21, 2012 8:18 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: And to Live in Peace -Post Hanako's Good End- (Ch4 up)
Replies: 123
Views: 92326

Re: And to Live in Peace -Post Hanako's Good End- (Ch2 up)

Present Pieces is now updated to the Enhanced Edition (I'm totally not ripping this off), with more meaningful scenes, abridged mundane scenes and better segues from one scene to another. Thanks everyone who bothered to post feedback/praises, and special thanks to Mirage_GSM and Daitengu for their e...
by Ascended Flutist
Fri Apr 20, 2012 4:28 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: And to Live in Peace -Post Hanako's Good End- (Ch4 up)
Replies: 123
Views: 92326

Re: And to Live in Peace -Post Hanako's Good End- (Ch2 up)

I guess they might be important to recognize in a historical sense, since they did help scientists understand light, but I can't think of many high school students who can actually do line integrals or partial derivatives. Therefore, it seems strange to me that Mutou would insist that writing them ...
by Ascended Flutist
Fri Apr 20, 2012 11:40 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: And to Live in Peace -Post Hanako's Good End- (Ch4 up)
Replies: 123
Views: 92326

Re: And to Live in Peace -Post Hanako's Good End- (Ch2 up)

Well damn, I asked for feedback and advices, and I get just that. Capital !

I'll get a second draft done. And to Live in Peace : Enhanced Edition comin' up !
by Ascended Flutist
Fri Apr 20, 2012 10:00 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: And to Live in Peace -Post Hanako's Good End- (Ch4 up)
Replies: 123
Views: 92326

Re: And to Live in Peace -Post Hanako's Good End- (Ch2 up)

I actually seem to have missed this update... It's nice, but the last third or so drags a bit too long without much happening. Do you have any plot for this other than simply a slice of life story? Yes. I felt it dragged on a little at the end. I tried to keep it short, but obviously that failed. M...
by Ascended Flutist
Fri Apr 20, 2012 4:30 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: And to Live in Peace -Post Hanako's Good End- (Ch4 up)
Replies: 123
Views: 92326

Changelog

This post served no purpose, so I'm turning it into a changelog so you guys can not freak out at the number of times I edit my damn chapters. Bear in mind I'm beginning this the 23/06, and posts had already been altered many times at that point. Changes made : From 11/04 to 23/06 All Chapters (1,2 &...
by Ascended Flutist
Wed Apr 18, 2012 5:07 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Unexpected Miracles. (Misha - Part 1: 04/15)
Replies: 16
Views: 6659

Re: Unexpected Miracles. (Misha - Part 1: 04/15)

Don't be too hard on yourself. The writing itself was good. As for the premises, unleash the Ultimate Author Protection Words : Suspension of Disbelief and Lampshade Hanging !
by Ascended Flutist
Wed Apr 18, 2012 4:35 pm
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Scattered Scenes - 'Rin's Itch' added 5/20
Replies: 54
Views: 22428

Re: Scattered Scenes - 'Unfamiliar Gestures' added 4/18

Yay, another one of those ! \(°jj°)/
I like your fics, ah, Si-, er, Mad-, er, yes. They're always nice, light and sweet. Like floating islands for brain. The touch of humor can be the caramell on top.

Hmmmm, floating islands.

I'll edit this post when I've found something worthwhile to say.
by Ascended Flutist
Wed Apr 18, 2012 4:09 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: Hugs for Everyone! ... except you Shizune.
Replies: 24
Views: 15424

Re: Hugs for Everyone! ... except you Shizune.

My liver exploded out of my body because I laughed too much, and I can't bend to pick it up because the d'awwwws of this story pumped my blood full of sugar and now it hurts when I move. On the bright side, sugar-blood clots much faster.

(°jj°')
by Ascended Flutist
Wed Apr 18, 2012 3:46 am
Forum: Fan Fiction
Topic: And to Live in Peace -Post Hanako's Good End- (Ch4 up)
Replies: 123
Views: 92326

Present Pieces

Here goes the second chapter, featuring sport-related shenanigans, vague cooking recipes, shameless book endorsement and actual science. It's also long as shit . TABLE OF CONTENT _____________________ 1 - Soft Passage 2 - Present Pieces 3 - Free to Soar 4 - Something Old, Something New _____________...
by Ascended Flutist
Tue Apr 17, 2012 11:19 am
Forum: Public Discussion
Topic: The "feels" bazaar.
Replies: 2254
Views: 608365

Re: What do you do to feel better after a night of the feels

Spice (and feels) must flow. "I must not know these feels. Feels are the mind-killers. Feels are the little-death that brings total obliteration. I will face my feels. I will permit them to pass over me and through me. And when they have gone past I will turn the inner eye to see their path. W...