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- Thu Mar 22, 2012 7:54 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Scar Tissue- A Hanako Story (Pseudo-Complete)
- Replies: 156
- Views: 80642
Re: Scar Tissue- A Hanako Story (Pseudo-Complete)
After some thought I think I've figured out why I dislike the ending; I had trouble with the notion that Hanako would suggest surrogacy, and then follow it up with "oh by the way, I totally betrayed your trust in a moment of extreme selfishness." Quite apart from questions of whether that...
- Thu Mar 22, 2012 6:36 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: an idea need help
- Replies: 5
- Views: 2531
Re: an idea need help
Depends.
Are they girsl you see in teh background of the game?
Mite be cool.
Totally original characters of your own design?
We'll have to see, but take it slow; a whole new character requires a lot more work that just borrowing an established persona.
Are they girsl you see in teh background of the game?
Mite be cool.
Totally original characters of your own design?
We'll have to see, but take it slow; a whole new character requires a lot more work that just borrowing an established persona.
- Thu Mar 22, 2012 6:34 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Themocaw's Saki Pseudo-Route
- Replies: 153
- Views: 112152
Re: Themocaw's Saki Pseudo-Route
Darling was a bit annoying after every single line, but with milady its gonna be even worse. It might just be me, but I think that Saki calls Hisao ''darling'' over and over again because she thinks it is amusing. As in, she's a minitroll regarding that particular name. Absolutely. These two are na...
- Thu Mar 22, 2012 3:56 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Scar Tissue- A Hanako Story (Pseudo-Complete)
- Replies: 156
- Views: 80642
Re: Scar Tissue- A Hanako Story (Complete)
Thanks for the criticism. Perhaps the ending was resolved a little too quickly on Hisao and Lilly's side, but I always thought the ending was self evident from practically the beginning.
- Thu Mar 22, 2012 7:09 am
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Scar Tissue- A Hanako Story (Pseudo-Complete)
- Replies: 156
- Views: 80642
Re: Scar Tissue- A Hanako Story
Well, I did say I might write an Epilogue, didn't I?themocaw wrote:I'm tempted to write Hisao/Hanako/Lilly threesome porn now.
...I like that idea.Alternatively you should do an epilogue set ten years in the future from the POV of their collective child thinking about his two mamas.
- Thu Mar 22, 2012 7:05 am
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Scar Tissue- A Hanako Story (Pseudo-Complete)
- Replies: 156
- Views: 80642
Re: Scar Tissue- A Hanako Story
On topic, I don't mind the ending but it seems a bit backwards to me. I would think the confessions would come first, and discussion of surrogacy after. Offering to do something that important for someone right before you tell them you betrayed their trust doesn't make a lot of sense to me. Still, ...
- Thu Mar 22, 2012 12:03 am
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Scar Tissue- A Hanako Story (Pseudo-Complete)
- Replies: 156
- Views: 80642
Re: Scar Tissue- A Hanako Story
Part Nine I spend the rest of the day on the computer, getting only a few hours sleep before work. Like it has been the last few weeks, the routine of getting ready for work is spent in silence, the three of us just trying to keep moving. Several times I catch Lilly or Hisao looking at me as if the...
- Tue Mar 20, 2012 4:58 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Scar Tissue- A Hanako Story (Pseudo-Complete)
- Replies: 156
- Views: 80642
Re: Scar Tissue- A Hanako Story
Someone asked for a pic of Akira's cleavage. I couldn't help but oblige. Here's my lame ass art of Akira (attachment). I think I can see where the story is going. I'm not entirely sure if I want to be proven wrong. So as usual, I must wait for the next installment. Happy writing! Cheers, BlackWaltz...
- Mon Mar 19, 2012 10:08 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Scar Tissue- A Hanako Story (Pseudo-Complete)
- Replies: 156
- Views: 80642
Re: Scar Tissue- A Hanako Story
I don't think it was ever much of a secret.Mahorfeus wrote:I want to say I can see where this is going, but that's what I said three chapters ago.
- Mon Mar 19, 2012 4:35 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Scar Tissue- A Hanako Story (Pseudo-Complete)
- Replies: 156
- Views: 80642
Re: Scar Tissue- A Hanako Story
Part Eight "Can you hear me now? "I can hear you, but I can't see you! What the hell is wrong with this thing?!" "I can't see you either, just be patient, it might be buffering. Is it buffering on your end?" "What the hell does buffering mean? Oh, God, what is this, I'...
- Sun Mar 18, 2012 4:36 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Surprise Visitor
- Replies: 12
- Views: 9213
Re: Surprise Visitor
Love it, love it, love it!
An interesting change to how the relationship progressed.
An interesting change to how the relationship progressed.
- Sat Mar 17, 2012 9:02 pm
- Forum: Public Discussion
- Topic: Hanako and Lilly's discussion (Lilly spoilers)
- Replies: 19
- Views: 7385
Re: Hanako and Lilly's discussion (Lilly spoilers)
I always assumed Hanako took Lilly outside for girl talk.
Needless to say, what was exactly said will remain a mystery to me for all time.
Needless to say, what was exactly said will remain a mystery to me for all time.
- Sat Mar 17, 2012 4:07 pm
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Scar Tissue- A Hanako Story (Pseudo-Complete)
- Replies: 156
- Views: 80642
Re: Scar Tissue- A Hanako Story
Part Seven Over the next several days, Hisao and I take turns staying at home to keep Lilly company. Neither of us say it, but I get the idea Hisao might be worried Lilly could hurt herself, accidentally or otherwise. Both he and I contact Shizune and explain the situation to her and Misha. The two...
- Sat Mar 17, 2012 5:31 am
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Scar Tissue- A Hanako Story (Pseudo-Complete)
- Replies: 156
- Views: 80642
Re: Scar Tissue- A Hanako Story
Oh, good God, you guys are making me really nervous now.
I pray I can deliver.
I pray I can deliver.
- Fri Mar 16, 2012 1:40 am
- Forum: Fan Fiction
- Topic: Scar Tissue- A Hanako Story (Pseudo-Complete)
- Replies: 156
- Views: 80642
Re: Scar Tissue- A Hanako Story
Thank you, BlackWaltz , for pointing out the misspells on Hisao and the tag. I believe a story is like a diamond; the more polishing, the brighter it shines. And thanks to everyone for the compliments and tips. It's keeps me going. Note: I am not a Doctor. I am relying on prime-time television medic...