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Unfortunately, after the beginning I have a hard time reading because of the character's name. "Kezukio", really? I do not care if the name of a Japanese OC has no particular significance (also because I know little to nothing of Japanese) but this seems just a bad misspelling of "Kaz...

Can you tie a tie one-handed? Because it's freaking hard, and in her scenes it was made pretty clear that she doesn't adapt to her disability as well as the main girls. Did you notice that she keeps her tie quite loose? Unless it's just a way to be "boyish", it may be evidence that she do...

I don't have time to write much right now but, what do you think about expading the profiles first? Since they are the results of discussions and exchanges of ideas, Hisao and Shizune's ended up richer than the other characters, who would deserve more detail as well (I have some ideas).

Since the removal of Lelouch was mentioned, was the guy who took his place given a name and a disability, like the other classmates?

The paragraph about what the other girls and some other classmates are doing now was nice. Is your idea for a future story to write about them, or do you intend to keep the focus on Hisao and Shizune?

I first noticed your fanfic on Fanfiction.net and a small criticism that was levied at it was that it seemed implausible to have Hanako stay in presence of Naomi with only a towel on, as she didn't seem to have progressed enough to feel comfortable that way. After the latest chapter, however, I can ...

Like Shizune's nickname, fits this AU characterization. That doll represents the girl she sent to hospital right? Anyway, thanks again for making these. Hope the discussion will give you more ideas!

Nice idea but I think Hisao would still to have some problems, like the anger issues and fights with other boys, although nothing particularly serious to a level that would have sent him to jail, mixed with the different angle of his parents' rare presence at home I mentioned earlier; this would be ...

Since there's Rika already, why not her too? Main reason is that her sprite from the original AFD fake screenshot is cut off too low by the text bar to use. I see. She could at least get an appearance when the message "not enough Katawa Points" appears - not unlike when you hit Naomi and ...

If it was for me, I'd edit that sex scene out of the first chapter, reserving it for the XXX side stories :p Really, the premise was bad but the fic got better and better. I really liked the characterization of Hisao's parents - they are people full of flaws, but also of love for their son. The earl...

In its shortness, perfectly to the point, and really pleasant to read. It stays perfectly in character with all we see and know of Akira in the game. I'm also inclined to think that seeing what happened to Hisao and Lilly prompted her to not give up on her love too, finding the solution of bringing ...

Well, now the OP of that thread has decided to take one of the suggested backgrounds for Shizune, although it sounds a bit "soft" compared to the others... Still, I can see Shizune's pushy attitude brought to the extreme here - even in the Yamaku "prison", she would have the same...

I was thinking that Misha's sentimental attraction to Shizune may be mantained some way... What was that psychological thing called, "transfert"? Misha, bein an aspiring counsellor, at first is afraid of staying with Shizune, who despite the guilt is still the same pushy girl who wants to ...

Fantastic drawings, I already liked the "Criminal Girls" idea so seeing art of it is even better. Now there's only Shizune missing but she hasn't been well-defined in that discussion yet... At least, I see her with a Misha that, opposite to the one we know, would be nervous and afraid to b...

¿How about this? Hisao feels neglected and angry. He takes this anger on other people, lashing out at any minimal offence (either real or imagined). One day, he gets in a fight and injures a boy, who happens to be the brother/cousin/close friend of his crush Iwanako. Iwanako faces him for it and, i...