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AAHH good god I am sorry for not updating for like three weeks. I am a bad person

In other news, MORE writing! It's over here: http://ks.renai.us/viewtopic.php?f=52&t=6021

Day Zero, Year Zero:


I sit on my suitcase outside the walls of Yamaku, admiring the patterns on the cobblestone and concrete- lines of cracked cement intersecting with chunks of rock, weaving in and out of the shadows cast by the mid-day sun. I trace the shadows, lines and circles ebb and flow ...

Now, I understand that prequels generally aren't released, you know, during the production of the original work. I'm lazy and I have writers block, but I feel like an ass for not updating my other story, Lover's Gasp / Lover's Grasp regularly. So here I'm going to collate my work. Series will be ...

Thanks for all of the proofreading- edits have been made!
Specifically, WolfStreak, xaolindragon and Mahorfeus (nope, you were wrong -___-)

@Carnival Nights: Yes! More characters will be appearing. I have mini-arcs planned for Emi and Lilly so far, but I have NO idea if I want to or even can ...

Ok, stuff that bothers me: I understand that Rin is supposed to come off as depressed, but it seems a tad heavy-handed at times. I'd have gone with a bit more subtlety, especially in relation to the self-mutilation and whatnot.

Negativity over! DAMN that was good. I know writing for Rin is tough ...

Duly noted! Also, that's 50 million YEN, not USD. Rin's not that great.

Yet.

“Honestly, I was kind of surprised- not by her looking for a photographer, but rather that she called me directly. I mean, I didn't really know Rin that well,” Hanako says as she jumps into the couch in the living room. “I don't recall her being all that friendly with anyone except for you, and I ...

Thanks for the critiques and comments, y'all! I was experimenting to see if the change in perspective would work, and clearly it didn't >:3 I'm on my reading week break, so I'm currently working on another chapter for you guys. I'll also be putting links to the other chapters in the first post, once ...

By the time we finish getting dinner and groceries, it's well past 10. As I'm loading up the fridge, Rin wriggles out of her tank top and yoga pants in the living room. We fall into bed together, and Rin wraps her legs around mine with a strength her thin frame disguises well.

“Hisao.”

It's a ...

Sweet jesus, this is ridiculous. If I could cry, I would be bawling my eyes out right now.

Yeah, I'm just going to curl up in a ball for the next hour or so.

People have a lot of ideas about what love is. I can't say I have a concrete definition, but I've definitely got ideas. Love can be a lot of things. One of those things is carrying on a conversation with your partner while she's shitting as if nothing is out of the ordinary.

“Hisao, are you free ...

gecko wrote: The atmosphere here seems different - it's just dedication, not desperation, it makes it much less threatening.

Yeah, that's what I was going for. Forgetting to eat and, you know, forcing yourself to not eat in an attempt to inspire yourself are different

OOH! Yes! Criticism is good.
Could you go into more detail? How exactly does she seem worse?

Thanks, you two! Second chapter incoming. Also, Sperance, the link to your fanfiction Little Pieces (the one in your sig) is broken.

Join Rin and Hisao as they live their normal, post-Yamaku life. Well, as normal as you can be with Rin.

For links to other chapters,

Chapter 2: http://ks.renai.us/viewtopic.php?f=52&t=5154#p73925
Chapter 3: http://ks.renai.us/viewtopic.php?f=52&t=5154&start=15#p81076
Chapter 4 *NEW* : http ...