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Saw someone posting this with regard to his own fanfiction on /vg/ and figured I'd do the same.

The rape scene, obviously

Courtesy of a specific Steam Group that pretty clearly enjoys reading and writing.

Robnonymous wrote:As for the feels... well... Let's just say the next part isn't happy...

:o

Now I'm curious. And probably need to read whatever you have other than the first one. What I speak of is not yet posted anywhere. And I am seeing some improvements to tense, but there's still some small errors cropping up. And to be honest, I think that first person works better with present than ...

Snow_Storm wrote: Also, visual novels aren't video games

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Video_game
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Adventure_game
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Visual_novel

Want good feely stuff? See that yogurt guy You don't know what you're getting yourself into. ­ ­ And also, the tenses are a big issue, and I may scold you a quite a bit until you stick to one. Sentences like I walk out of the bathroom and almost ran into a naked Kenji. seriously hurt the presentati...

It doesn't bother me too much in the case of the letters, since, well, that's how I wrote when I was 18 years old and trying very hard to be sincere. This was intentional. When it comes to the narration, though, it can get iffy to have the POV character oscillating between lines like, This was not....

Is this one really that bad that nobody wants to respond? Or is it that flawless that nobody wants to respond?

To Whom It May Concern Only when a white blur darts across my field of vision do I realize that I had lost myself in the outside world again. It must have been a bird or something, snapping me out of my trance. I really need to kill these habits of daydreaming and improve my work ethic. Or, if poss...

but how can she read if she needs glasses?

yeah we've never had this thread before

Guest wrote: Just out of curiosity, what was Hisao's job when he was alive?

Love Guru

The wording for the choices didn't imply that at all.
Of course, this wouldn't be the first time that something like that happened. "I'm fine," anyone?

You know that a VN protag is well written when you tell him to do something and he refuses to do it.