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MusedMoose wrote:And I'm no wizard, though with two overstuffed bookshelves, I've got enough books to pretend to be one. ^_^

>books
>books made out of paper and ink and binding
Enjoy pretending to be an outdated old school wizard while us cool kids pretend to be technomancers. Go magitek or go home.

Exchange of words. You're in dangerous waters here. Hisao's view on Hanako are alarmingly close to fanboyism. It'd be nice if you somehow made it clear whether he's crossed that line or not. As it is, it's uncomfortably ambiguous. Though maybe this was by design. Shit nigga, you're gonna have to ex...

Was that a manly picnic reference I saw there or am I just crazy? No, it was a girly picnic reference. Get it right, gawsh. Anyway, on the topic of Hanako being so willing to get back into sex, this isn't their second time. I plan on writing that later. I tell myself that what happened here will se...

Dog Days “Well, here we are.” Hanako’s words carry an air of tranquility with them, a modest statement to conclude an uneventful day. And she’s entirely right. Here we are, arms linked, standing in front of the summer house I’ve been told so much about. It’s quite the sight despite its modest statu...

So, first things first: this is part one of the fic I am writing, and while it still has a lot of work to be done, I figured it would be a good birthday present if I could have it "finished" today. So this post is reserved for the Pre Script, the following is for the first part of the fic ...

Ascended Flutist wrote:rehash

Garver hasn't actually read a certain fic with a Latin name to my knowledge, because when I used the sunset scene at the end of the 3rd chapter of it as a comparison to the sunset scene at the end of the second chapter of this fic, he seemed rather clueless as to what I was talking about.

so what was the party that you mentioned as taking the easy way out anyway?

Yeah I already told you my thoughts, and I don't really see what's changed happened since the last version, but I'll just trust you and say that it's most likely an improvement. Yes that means that they were subtle. But it's probably better than going full kneejerk and mutilating everything. Because...

I think I saw the words "weave" and "deliver" rather often

okay I don't know what you're talking about, but I was suggesting that if you think something is super long, that you upload it to pastebin and give us the link here

maybe I should have made that more clear instead of being too internet-y

>what is pastebin

Why is it so short sadface Anyway, yeah, the people on here throw a fit whenever something isn't in typical prose format, so I'm going to share with you a little thing that I've taken to doing. Write in a way that makes sense even without the names precluding each line, such as designating speakers,...

"Lilly... I'm sorry." She cocks her head. "This is my fault. I always treated her like a child, like someone who needed protecting. Like I was her knight in shining armor." "In a way, Hisao, you were." I'm sorry... what? Then what was Hanako's outburst about? "Oka...

I think there was a total of about 2 comments that I came up with when I read this after you posted it in crispychat, so let's see if I can't find them again The scene where Hanako is freaking out as Lilly and Hisao approach seem to drag on for far too long. Lilly and Hisao must be very slow walkers...

I thought it would have a dark ending, but it actually ended on a good note. Yeah it was like a triple bait and switch, and I often wondered if I pulled it off well at all. Above all else I wanted there to be some really good reasons behind the rooftop scene at the end happening the way it did. Thi...