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Ye gods, kosher, you've really done it now... We should've known, though. When the Bacon tags a story as "NO YURI", run. Run as far as your legs can carry you. Run across hills, plains, mountains and oceans. Or accept your fate, read the story, and visit Neuman for some of his kosher-grade...

kosherbacon wrote:

en dash vs em dash

SON OF A—
Another thing I've been doing wrong all these years.

You and probably a couple dozens more of them writers here ">_> Heck, I don't even know where to find that M-dash O.o

That plot twist hit me with the force of a cannonball, actually ">_> Goes to show how oblivious I can be sometimes

Well, sometimes epilogues will prove to be a necessity... ">_>

... Would definitely get a 16+ rating in my country ">_> Nice piece of work

Well, I can't remember her visiting him in the hospital Actually, during Hisao's hospital stay, he does mention Iwanako being pretty much the only person who would regularly visit him besides his parents. All of his other schoolmates stopped within the first few weeks. Iwanako kept going, but as ti...

I think you may the among a rare minority in this case, 'badger... O.o

Don't suppose there'll be an Act 1 V5 release just for the changes to the music, will there ? Also, IMHO, I don't think we'll have to worry about Parity being ditched completely, that tune is just too perfect for Rin to make disappear

"sad girl in snow" type stories

Not from the main article, but one of the comments... And just think, with the opening scene of KS, doesn't it also have a "sad girl in snow", too?

Ok, so maybe more panickey than sad, but still...

Personally, I love how you had Hisao mess with Seth about Kenji's theories :3 (yes, I always poke at the little things, don't mind me) As for other things... Your writing style is easy to read (a plus), you have little to no trouble using interpunction (another plus), and so far, the minor character...

I didn't try to make her unlikeable, though. Maybe pathetic and annoying, but not unlikeable. So that's something I'll have to work on if I ever write about her again. thanks! I don't think you could've prevented Mirage's dislike of alter-Shizune, based on what he said. For what it's worth, I don't...

Napalm wrote:Or at least a game where the winner gets to chose something the loser has to do.

Shizune will do this, most likely

And then end up losing to Hisao in a surprise comeback victory...

... Only in America, I'm inclined to think ">_>

Great job there, but shouldn't this be under fanart?

edit: don't mind me, wasn't paying attention to what section this thread was in T_T

Impressive. That's all I can say.